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TanmayChawla: Thanks still new.

The Hidden Genius of Konoha ( A naruto fan-fic)
3 months ago

void893: The English is not the worst but needs a lot of improvement.
Right now the novel doesn’t flow along at all. It feels jagged with how key transition words are usually missing from the sentences.

Also the author usually tells without showing.
(What I mean by that is that a lot of actions are told to us when they don’t need to be explicitly pointed out)

Example of how it should be : I walked over to where my mum lounged in her chair, relaxedly flipping through a novel, I had to cough lightly to grab her attention “*Kehum* .. mum can I talk with for a second” mum finished the last line she was on before looking up at me “sure thing honey, what’s up?”

Example of what it is right now : I walk over to mum reading book with my book and ask her “mum can I talk something” she look up and says “sure honey what you want to talk to?”

Do you see the problem??
One reads like something soft while the other is like a jagged razor blade.
It breaks immersion.
I’m not saying is English is easy but if you’re gonna write in it then you’re gonna need to do more than that.

Rebirth 1973 · C1
3 months ago

CasualPsychoReader: Space the paragraphs more and add dots(.) and pauses(,) when appropriate, you have some problems with grammar too. If I think of something you can correct I may add it (randomly i don't have too much free time)

The Hidden Genius of Konoha ( A naruto fan-fic)
3 months ago
Reading Status: C3
Space the paragraphs more and add dots(.) and pauses(,) when appropriate, you have some problems with grammar too. If I think of something you can correct I may add it (randomly i don't have too much free time) View More
The Hidden Genius of Konoha ( A naruto fan-fic)
3 months ago
I noticed that you have the problem with words that end with -ed(forced,kidnapped, finished,) View More
Story of an Unfortunate Man(MCU verse) · C1
4 months ago
Sorry but what I mean is that you often make a character too op and gradually lose interest in that fic, I would rather like a powerful character that isn't all about strength but using his intellect too View More

DaoistBoyToy: sorry, what? do you want him OP or??? but besides that, I only abandon my books if I lose inspiration on it

RE: Percy Jackson World · C0
4 months ago
Make him too op***(correction) View More

CasualPsychoReader: I'm waiting to see if you abandon this fic when you make too op

RE: Percy Jackson World · C0
4 months ago
I'm waiting to see if you abandon this fic when you make too op View More
RE: Percy Jackson World · C0
4 months ago
See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon View More
Godly Model Creator · C1
4 months ago
See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon View More
Godly Model Creator · C1
4 months ago
See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon View More
Library of Heaven's Path · C1
4 months ago
You would end up better creating separate chapter that you will update than giving his status at end of chapter, that way you wouldn't trash the immersion View More
Long Live Super Summoner System · C2
5 months ago
A shouted and cursed person▶️a person shouted and cursed View More
James Allen: The Flash's Twin Brother · C0
5 months ago
There are a lot less mistakes made than in the start. That's surprising, considering that most of the authors don't correct them and make them even when they are pointed out. View More
Harry Potter And The Rise Of Golden Falcon · C0
5 months ago
There are a LOT of mistakes in entire fic. View More
Fan-Fiction: Journey of Lionel in the Multiverse · C8
5 months ago
There are a lot of mistakes. I won't bother going through all of them but still, if this is the standard of this fic I'm not going to waste my time on it. Sure it's not as bad as some I've seen but it's one of the lower ones, you know the ones that make me feel like I'm becoming more stupid the more I read it. I understand that English may not be your first language but it's not excuse to make some of the basic mistakes (gender(he,she) (to be(are,is,were,was etc)). My standards aren't that high, you know? English too isn't my first language and I don't write like I don't know the basic grammar.
Sorry if you are offended but it lay on my chest for a while now, sorry if I'm taking it out on you. English not being your first language become some sort of excuse for poor grammar lately(for a lot of author's). Maybe read twice or thrice before publishing to find mistakes, that way you can check and correct the ones you found. View More
Harry Potter And The Rise Of Golden Falcon · C3
5 months ago
Occlumancy---- Occlumency View More
Harry Potter And The Rise Of Golden Falcon · C2
5 months ago
Very less magical power---'''--- a very small amount of magical power View More
Harry Potter And The Rise Of Golden Falcon · C2
5 months ago
Has a lot of mistakes in grammar View More
In the world of Naruto with the Gacha System · C1
5 months ago
You got money wrong , it's berry and you didn't give us classification so how are we supposed to know how strong is 150's in stats compared to Pirates? View More
One Piece: Strongest King System · C0
5 months ago
I. We. They. Their? Why do you change that so many times ? View More
Marvel Emperor · C1
5 months ago
Don't change the POV so suddenly!!?!! View More
The System User in Another World · C3
6 months ago
That last line too forced at least to me and maybe too cliche View More
Supernatural Strongest Being · C5
6 months ago
You sure don't correct the mistakes that we point out huh? View More
Supernatural Strongest Being · C4
6 months ago
I don't think that mentality sticks, he was supposed to be near n 1 assassin no? Now he is behaving like idiotic child View More
Reborn with 10 wish · C11
6 months ago
Thanks View More

cade2065: Yeah your right, I was able to find some info here-https://***.wlnupdates.com/series-id/85037/eternal-domination-in-marvel-world

Eternal Domination in Marvel World
7 months ago
I tried, didn't find it View More

cade2065: Though you should be able to find the novel by googling it, he included the name of the novel, as well as the author name.

Eternal Domination in Marvel World
7 months ago
It's in synopsis View More

cade2065: Is this not a fanfiction? What makes you think this is a translated work?

Eternal Domination in Marvel World
7 months ago
When I first saw the first line it was something like yay a fanatic of webnovels died 🤣🤣🤣 View More
Reborn in the king of the gods · C1
7 months ago
He could go to the Cultivation Chat Group universe and portray himself as a powerful senior View More
Multiverse Wanderer (With Cheats) · C1
7 months ago
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