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What?
All I was pointing out is that in English 'Surname' doesn't just mean 'second name' but refers to the hereditary 'family name'.
So your first comment was confusing but I got what you meant. View More

ChocoLatte: From the way you say it, it seems like you don't even know how Chinese names work and you are not an avid reader so I can see how you are ignorant of the name sequence. My explanation is relatively straightforward, but for people who doesn't understand how it works, I don't even know how to explain it to you.
It's respecting the names of the characters & the author by correctly translating as how the culture should be and not whatever works because he/she is lazy in translating.

Almighty Coach · C20
2 weeks ago

SoaringImmortal: It would have been more fun if he left them in the list till day 1 for the sports school trials..that way the ***aches in the school would have been held responsible for their declining sports ability 😈😈

Almighty Coach · C26
2 weeks ago
Wow, too bad this isn't illegal everywhere to fire for personal grievances. View More
Almighty Coach · C20
2 weeks ago
Surname in front?
In English (I believe), Surnames are Family names and Family names in front is how it's done in the East.
I know you meant that it annoys you to see the Given name in front of the Family name but the way you wrote it was confusing to me. View More

ChocoLatte: I'm sorry, but as someone who read lots of novels and also a Chinese, I'm pretty annoyed with the TL putting their surname INFRONT of their first name. Just my 2cents worth..

Almighty Coach · C20
2 weeks ago
Though it did confirm that his youth was really crap
I could also speculate where the MC would go after HP if there is a new world after this one. View More

AdamNics: I don't like this.
It feels like I got teased.
It might not even be better than an author note.
I enjoy speculating and this doesn't really give me any new information.

Skyrim system in Harry Potter World · C36
3 weeks ago
I don't like this.
It feels like I got teased.
It might not even be better than an author note.
I enjoy speculating and this doesn't really give me any new information. View More

uSeer: I like this.

Skyrim system in Harry Potter World · C36
3 weeks ago
After reading that, I think shadow clone might just be used to make his death realistic. View More
Reincarnated as Tony Stark with a Skill · C1
3 weeks ago
That also doesn't even mention more abstract or monster things.
Don't know if you can make the brain mutatable or the core, maybe even the soul and and anything in between all of those. View More

AdamNics: It's a monster, so you don't know what they have.
I can only think of;
the heart(the blood stuff),
Spiracles and trachea(the breathing stuff)
The community stomach(I'm hoping a shared colony subspace)
Malphighan tubules?
Maybe the immune system? Ants have colony immune systems apparently.

Chrysalis · C366
1 month ago
It's a monster, so you don't know what they have.
I can only think of;
the heart(the blood stuff),
Spiracles and trachea(the breathing stuff)
The community stomach(I'm hoping a shared colony subspace)
Malphighan tubules?
Maybe the immune system? Ants have colony immune systems apparently. View More

Great_Y: Did all his organs become mutable or did he leave something out?

Chrysalis · C366
1 month ago

Zergling: --Hum author i am geting worried, this my be too many organ.,
--It will be a pain to remember what each one does in the future, as i had said before too much skills can be realy bad.
--I like the fusion part but maybe do that to some organs too, acid glands can get a fuse combo, and the carapace + iner caraparece can do it too.
--This is just my opinion

Chrysalis · C366
1 month ago
I was going to suggest a moke lizard, while easing the size limits a bit.
I always thought wards was HP formations (atleast on property, enchantments on everything else). So this chapter appears like him making a ward stone(ive read so much fanfiction, I'm not sure if that's cannon.). View More

Sonet: Suggest something along with his character in mind

Harry Potter and the Prince of Slytherin · C19
1 month ago
This makes me kinda pissed
The other three are childhood friends but Anna and her brother have never interacted with them.
Admittedly the fathers disappearance must have influenced things. Then Anna became withdrawn and Rebecca took advantage of that.
However the brother has never met them either. Though no friends of his has been shown yet, he doesn't seem that antisocial.
This would have been more believable for me if these three had been his friends already but then there would be less drama(which would make it more realistic ) View More

MomieIxai: They must had made a pact to get pregnant at the samw time lol

REBORN: Revenge · C34
1 month ago
The last, too many chapters, have felt like filler. This can be seen obviously when you miss a chapter and nobody notices. View More
Chrysalis · C360
1 month ago
Need to clear the cache.
You go to the very right user tab and at the top right there is a symbol that looks like a nut(like nuts and bolts) that will open a menu, one of the options there is 'Clear cache'. View More

Alandalf: 358 is still the same 358 as before and 359 and 360 are identical? My ANTicipation is building....

Chrysalis · C360
1 month ago

joakimbd: Clear your cache it usually works

Chrysalis · C360
1 month ago

joakimbd: They need to clear their cache

Chrysalis · C360
1 month ago
I think you could have left the system out of the wand picking.
The fact olivander didn't make any comments is bull****.
The wand picks the wizard.
That scene just destroyed that classic HP lore. View More
Wizardry System · C2
1 month ago
I wonder if he is going to do anything with sirius black? Maybe capture that rat and prove him innocent.
He could just get patriarch black to write a Will; including what sirius gets if he is innocent, gets married and makes an hier, perhaps also include tonks in the will since she shows the black talents.
Perhaps get tonks/lupin and sirius/? Kids to marry. View More
Reincarnation: Draco Malfoy · C61
1 month ago
It's good but I feel like his reaction/understanding his situation paragraphs are missing.

Also realised how slow the update is. View More
Taking on the Magical World · C1
1 month ago
Wow, feel like you just described 'New dawn', it's easier to include parseltongue if a Harry reincarnator is MC. View More

DragonkingKyo: thanks for the chapter. will this be a harem?(hope so) if not my suggestion is Hermione for the love interest please and if possible make him Parseltongue with a pet snake or magical snake(some kind of dragon snake hydrid).

Taking on the Magical World · C1
1 month ago
Yeah but there really should be a base, especially for more knowledge skills. You can get rusty but if you have proficiency in a skill, you can't become a complete novice without a mind wipe.

Maybe have it so the next level of that memory skill prevents him from losing knowledge experience, the first level should prevent this degradation a bit already if he has it. Then add a similar skill for the physical side of things. Then no more decrease! View More

MrMerlin: Well... Real life you know)) absence of practice makes you lose proficiency

Skyrim system in Harry Potter World · C30
1 month ago
If i chose a person who really got scew to look awful its Ron. The movies diminish Ron and idolises Hermione, this story does that even more. The few times you see him, he comes off a bit of a git.

Considering the love interest in the original, he kinda coming off as a bit of a Snape, that says know-it-all instead of mudblood.

I really feel like this is based on the film more than the books looking at how socialable Hermione is trying to be. View More

DarkDaoist: MC is reincarnate person we don't know who that is or which age he actually comes from, standing up for himself is good but then author takes a huge smelly dump on the entire series by making all the original characters appearing to be self-centered, lazy, idiotic and manipulating.
Hagrid a guy who can wrestle with trolls and fight death eaters is shown as superstitious and don't want to take care of harry anymore because he can speak parsletongue from the beginning, Snape is shown as self-centered, Minerva as lazy, Dumbledore as a manipulator and many other changes for other characters.
MC comes out as psychotic power hungry who uses children as lab rats to train his magic (and kills them too later redacted by author) and steals just cause he can. Wants to be a loner and shuts everyone out arrogantly and claims no one ever did nice things for him. He lives a self-fulfilling prophecy life where he is a loner and a possible end villain by behaving like arrogant young masters from xianxia

New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
1 month ago
Snape is quite self centred in the books.
Dumbledore is either manipulative or a bit incompetent and uncaring or run ragged(doing too much). Those are the only way to rationalise the plot points of the original works because they are illogically thrown in there to make a plot.
As for the minerva take, I would like to say she is in denial of the wizarding world's and the school's problems. View More

DarkDaoist: MC is reincarnate person we don't know who that is or which age he actually comes from, standing up for himself is good but then author takes a huge smelly dump on the entire series by making all the original characters appearing to be self-centered, lazy, idiotic and manipulating.
Hagrid a guy who can wrestle with trolls and fight death eaters is shown as superstitious and don't want to take care of harry anymore because he can speak parsletongue from the beginning, Snape is shown as self-centered, Minerva as lazy, Dumbledore as a manipulator and many other changes for other characters.
MC comes out as psychotic power hungry who uses children as lab rats to train his magic (and kills them too later redacted by author) and steals just cause he can. Wants to be a loner and shuts everyone out arrogantly and claims no one ever did nice things for him. He lives a self-fulfilling prophecy life where he is a loner and a possible end villain by behaving like arrogant young masters from xianxia

New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
1 month ago
Researching it;
- 'Kneazle' cats are pretty close to what I'm look for, except from them being too aggressive and arrogant, I don't know why the aren't in more use. Crookshanks, who is part kneazle would be great research material for a better cat. Perhaps give it magic sight(cat with cute little horns!) and maybe slight oclumancy of a 'wampus' cat.
- A camera and video function for the 'Magical phones' would probably be easy enough if he looked at some 'omnioculars'.
-The ministry could probably make issues with harry by 'Misuse of muggle artifacts'(Arthur's office), though clothes and luggage is being used for their intended purposes. These enchanted objects might easily get in the hands of muggles. That and his sharing of information with muggle parents could be shown as risking the 'Statute of wizarding secrecy'.
- His sharing of information(especially if he opens some sort of school, like in my other suggestion) with squibs and muggles might result in some of them passing the WOMBAT exam. View More

AdamNics: I really enjoyed this. It is very much focused on magic research and changing/modernising magical society.
The "romantic" relationships have been annoying but getting better. The MC EQ seems to be getting better and he is changing the people around him to react to him better.
There are some spelling mistakes and places where sections of writing are repeated in slightly different ways.
I'm looking forward to seeing the sirius situation handled, how the magic phone network developers and how he effects the school directly.

New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
2 months ago
Really filch's cat is almost like a sentry cat already, she reports on students to filch all the time and almost catches people underneath the invisibility cloak(I think).
Talking about filch, who is a squib. Maybe he should look into them(how that happens), hire them or maybe sponsor them into apprenticeships in the muggle world, which he can then use in the magical world. View More

AdamNics: I really enjoyed this. It is very much focused on magic research and changing/modernising magical society.
The "romantic" relationships have been annoying but getting better. The MC EQ seems to be getting better and he is changing the people around him to react to him better.
There are some spelling mistakes and places where sections of writing are repeated in slightly different ways.
I'm looking forward to seeing the sirius situation handled, how the magic phone network developers and how he effects the school directly.

New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
2 months ago
So you've dropped, I'm going to continue.
Would you like me to tell you if a certain thing happens or doesn't happen? as the case may be View More

guilhermecoimbra: Well, I actually dropped the story a little after of the review.

The reason is that the author' current focus is to play the emotional card with the pairings - first Hermione, now Ginny - to gather audience and it works. It's a disappointment for people who like HP for what it is and not some cheap "CEO" drama.

New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
2 months ago
Yeah, I would dislike it if a relationship with ginny happened, I'm hoping the author is including it to show an unhealthy idolisation. Ginny is a boring character, we've been there done that. However I think it would have been weird if her feelings weren't mentioned but the fact we get her POV is worrying. I'm hoping it's more about using a perspective we understand rather than a stranger, like the malfoy's POV. View More

guilhermecoimbra: Well, I actually dropped the story a little after of the review.

The reason is that the author' current focus is to play the emotional card with the pairings - first Hermione, now Ginny - to gather audience and it works. It's a disappointment for people who like HP for what it is and not some cheap "CEO" drama.

New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
2 months ago
SPOILER
There are a few things that I would like to see more developed or explained, like;
-For the MP Pros, the 'memory extraction spell' seems rare and annoying/painful(a memory that you lose gets dug out of your head), a 'memory copy spell' or device(if it isn't already in the phone) needs to be made/found.
-Should add a camera, weather, emergency services calls and be able to send stuff to a shared family/group/organisation hard drive that might also work like a forum, wardstone, security/surveillance system and spy camera.
-The sorting hat is really crap, it's mange looking, has an attitude and doesn't sort well. It need to be replaced or fixed; house sorting should be decided of three things, personality aspects, relationships and slightly what you want. This should be found out by oclumancy, questions and a set of trials(like a dream/memory). The minimum time would go up but that instant stuff is bull****.
-The slytherin and hufflepuff dormitories are really bad. One is underground(though the lake window is cool), the other is next to the "servants" (house elves).
-Speaking of house elves, what is filch's job? His jobs should be done by the house elves or some competent professionals. Can't leave patrolling the halls for house elves though, maybe make 'sentry cats' (really cute, suits the image and mcgonagall can hide among them) ; able to see/smell through polyjuice potions, invisibility, others and eat pests(rats, spiders, etc)
-As the school lacks teachers; it might be an idea to ask the wizarding community for memories of lessons. Those can be processed and used at the school or by making online lessons or a night/revision school. Can also do online tests.
Could also get people like the trunk guy or olivander to donate and store teaching material. View More

AdamNics: I really enjoyed this. It is very much focused on magic research and changing/modernising magical society.
The "romantic" relationships have been annoying but getting better. The MC EQ seems to be getting better and he is changing the people around him to react to him better.
There are some spelling mistakes and places where sections of writing are repeated in slightly different ways.
I'm looking forward to seeing the sirius situation handled, how the magic phone network developers and how he effects the school directly.

New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
2 months ago
Actually it does mention she makes an unbreakable vow not to reveal his secrets, I think. View More

Chibi_Senpai: Honestly I still really don’t know what I expected from this novel and what kind of mc the author truly wanted to create. Maybe he’s just trying to please the readers and I truly wish the best but I can finally see this novel is really not for me.
I don’t even remember what made me pick up this novel but I thought it’d be a dark/cold/pragmatic Harry novel. I honestly liked the beginning but things kind of took a downward turn when Hermione was introduced. I still remember the moment something popped up in the back of my mind that I wasn’t going to be able to binge read a hundred chapters. It was when Harry hugged Hermione and got addicted to the warmth. From them I knew it was a wrap and the cool headed stable logical mc was in danger.
Despite the fact that he’d known her less than a year and she was 11 years old, the mc proceeded to get dangerously attached to Hermione even though their ideals couldn’t be more conflicting. I’d originally applauded his decision to groom her into his subordinate as she truly was a gifted witch but I wonder where it went so wrong as the author seemed to heighten his emotions for her when it was obvious how dangerously stupid falling for a little girl was. He taught her and revealed to her a majority of his secrets while her loyalty was never certain. It’s like he deluded himself into thinking it was a sure thing they were going to spend their lives together. Meanwhile she’s just eleven, fickle and easily able to be turned against him.
I don’t know, I blame reader’s obsession with seeing an mc with empathy, ‘human’ emotions, and showing genuine care for those close to him. Maybe it’s just a difference of preference but I disliked how irrational, delusional and emotionally invested he became when it had to do with Hermione. It sometimes felt like the author was inhabiting the mc and was very enamored with Hermione/Emma Watson. I won’t deny it, I can somewhat understand where he’s coming from as I dealt with the same challenges when writing myself but I made sure to separate myself from the mc and try not to show favoritism to a specific female character.
Hermione was originally meant to be a pawn but ended up owning the mc’s very fragile heart and unstable mind. It’s disheartening honestly and a primary reason why I’m dropping this novel. I wanted a cool headed mc who got things done and wasn’t controlled by his dxck or emotions. I’m not really a fan of overly emotional protagonists so I’m just gonna get off the ride while I can after reading 35 chapters. Reading other reviews showed me things don’t really change in future chapters since the author is dead set on Hermione even though their personalities directly clash. And instead of the mc corrupting and subordinating her, she’s ended up doing his head in. He acted irrationally by revealing to her all his secrets and I doubt he’s ever going to really take back control of the relationship. It’s too much angst for a bunch of 11 year olds to be dealing with.
Thus the mc and the story has just turned me off it. No hard feelings, wish the novel the best. I’m out.

New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
2 months ago

AdamNics: I really enjoyed this. It is very much focused on magic research and changing/modernising magical society.
The "romantic" relationships have been annoying but getting better. The MC EQ seems to be getting better and he is changing the people around him to react to him better.
There are some spelling mistakes and places where sections of writing are repeated in slightly different ways.
I'm looking forward to seeing the sirius situation handled, how the magic phone network developers and how he effects the school directly.

New Dawn- A Harry Potter Transmigration Fanfic
2 months ago
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