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Thanks for chapter.

This story is really good you have great talent as an author.

Am I the only one with '' nullb'' word at the start of almost every sentance?

Does anyone else see nullb or nulli at the start of almost every sentance? Its super annoying.

So I read a few comments and there are a bunch of 4 and 5 but no reasons for why that is. So I give it a solid 3 and ill try to give my reasons for this rating. So first thing first you didnt flesh out OC characters well. I just read this chapter and forgot their names I dont care about them and they arent special in any way. Now the detective work itself is nice but while concealing a child life and death is a good move its a classic and an overused one. Im not saying here reinvent the wheel there is no need for that but this didnt feel special or unique in any way. If you want to do these kinds of things you also need to give MC extra reward for not using sysem features it is too boring for him to be able to see reputation gain decrese and it kills tension. And lastly no big enemy or somebody to fight. Even in last part of explosion you shouldnt have MC yell the jutsu for us viewers it killed the tension as well. So these are some of my reason for lowering it to 3. Now things I think you did well mystery and detective work was rly cool to see its unique in naruto setting also use of sealing in this arc is phenomenal. Introduction of several of other poison users is also nice I live the expasion of lore that you are doing in general and I feel you tied that rly nicely here. Overall not bad you are clearly getting better as an author abd im rly hyped up to see what else you come up with. Thanks for chapter.

I dont think this recap was needed. Thanks for chapter. All you had to do was use last few sentancrs and move on.

Is he going back to grind now or we get some cool missions. I want canon to start but thats at around 210 you said so whats next. Please dont let it be training arc.

Im happy youre trying someting new. But when will canon come 300 chapters in?

Fix the grammar this chapter god is it bad. Almost every sentance or 2 there is a missing letter wrong use of times its atrocious to read. You should just take chapter down and repost it after you beta read it.

Calling it team kakashi seems rather arrogant to me it should be team 7

This second part after timeskip feels like Pokemon novel he is just collecting characters that MC met in original.