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Ninelions

Ninelions

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2018-10-04 Joined Global

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last sentence "At least, time I WAS willing..."

I hadn't unpacked yet, and because of that I still carried my personal belongings in my storage device. Part of that was because there hadn't been time. At least time I willing to spend on household chores instead of accessing the computer system I'd been given and the Alchemy Lab that had been set up as part of the apartment.

Renewal and Rebirth

Renewal and Rebirth

Fantasy Romance 路 F_Riley

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Nice Star Wars reference. 馃榿

Planets destroyed, spacecraft fighting heroic battles to protect rebel interests, drone strikes decimating people living in peace under the yoke of tyranny. Each saga a chapter, a grand epic where I sacrificed people indiscriminately. Foe or friend, nothing mattered or could stand before my greed, until my young disciple rebelled, unable to watch as I killed his son and daughter.

Renewal and Rebirth

Renewal and Rebirth

Fantasy Romance 路 F_Riley

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last sentence, "...death KNELL for the Sect."
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Renewal and Rebirth

Renewal and Rebirth

Fantasy Romance 路 F_Riley

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"...before matters got out of HAND."

"Don't worry about her, she has an extreme phobia of blood. Her fear of blood is so extreme that she faints every time blood is in her sight. After some rest, she will be fine." Charlotte explained before matters got out of her.

Gaming Sword Magician

Gaming Sword Magician

Fantasy 路 Lazy_leon

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"Her thighs covered by KNEE HIGH white socks."

She had red, shoulder-length hair and an oval face that suited her slender figure. She wore the standard outfit for a teacher, a tailored black skirt with a coordinate blouse. The blouse was covered by a black jacket. Her thighs covered by high knees white socks. A badge detailing that she was a teacher of the Royal frost fall academy was worn around her upper hand.

Gaming Sword Magician

Gaming Sword Magician

Fantasy 路 Lazy_leon

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"Thanks to this, the UNEASY atmosphere..."

The youngster continued to talk about different topics. Thanks to this the unease atmosphere between them has eased up and they became friendly.

Gaming Sword Magician

Gaming Sword Magician

Fantasy 路 Lazy_leon

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"...every NOOK and corner...."

Then they ride the carriage, heading towards their fateful destination, the Royal Frost Fall Academy. Hera Lin didn't need the guidance of a map. He had visited this city more times than he can count. He also underwent an awakening ceremony here, so did his little sister and little brother. In merely twenty-five years, he had traveled a lot. When he was a kid, he used to travel with his father, who is now unfortunately dead. As he grew up, traveling became a source of income. That's why he knew every knock and corner of this city and many others.

Gaming Sword Magician

Gaming Sword Magician

Fantasy 路 Lazy_leon

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"...it reached reached the inscription CARVED on God's statue..." There was the same mispelling in the last chapter.

The Master awakened placed his palms on the insignia in front of him. A wave of divine energy surged from his palm into the wide magic symbol. Traveling through the magic symbol, it reached the inscription craved on God's statue.

Gaming Sword Magician

Gaming Sword Magician

Fantasy 路 Lazy_leon

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This should probably be "...as if a cult...", rather than "...as if an occult...".
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Gaming Sword Magician

Gaming Sword Magician

Fantasy 路 Lazy_leon

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"Pearl of the Orient" refers to the Pearl Radio Tower in Shanghai and the governments attempt to make Shanghai the showpiece of China. It's mostly propaganda, but if the city attracts enough business and development, could easily be self-fulfilling.

Shanghai, also known as the pearl of the east, is the largest city in China and Asia's economic center. Anyone who has been to Shanghai knows that its modernity has nothing to envy to cities like New York.

Samsara Online

Samsara Online

Video Games 路 XIETIAN

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perhaps "Wing Chun target enchanted..." rather than "Wung Chun enchanted..."? Feels clunky either way. There should be a word that means "Wing Chun target". *nods* Yeah, that would be much better.

I forgot about my audience for a while. Lost in the joy of training, and the sensations I was gaining with my new Bow. Shot after shot I created arrows and fired. It took me a moment or two to understand the logic behind moving archery blocks. The Wing Chun enchanted to respond to melee attacks made sense, but for stationary ranged targets to also respond was genius. It was an innovative idea, and I forgot my resentment with Elder Dill.

Renewal and Rebirth

Renewal and Rebirth

Fantasy Romance 路 F_Riley

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"The SCRIPT acted..." rather than "The SCRIPTED acted..."

The use of array and runic script gave what would have been a stationary block of wood some interesting features. The scripted acted as programming, and the forms were elevated from more than a stationary piece of wood. They had been created to absorb damage, but with the arrays and scripts, they had become capable of turning absorbed Qi attacks back on the attacker.

Renewal and Rebirth

Renewal and Rebirth

Fantasy Romance 路 F_Riley

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This entire paragraph is amazing.

Mu Mian was just a year two Accountancy student at Wangdong University when he got to know Du Tingting. It was 1996, and the country's economy was still rather backward. The income disparity in the nation was very wide, and the school fees for an elite university sky-rocketed. Mu Mian had to pay $2,500 for just one year of schooling.

Letting Loose After Marrying A Tycoon

Letting Loose After Marrying A Tycoon

Contemporary Romance 路 Emperor Song

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