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If you do that, what's the point of building up a world on a system of martial arts?

Guns in a cultivation world. I think I've said enough, but what was this person thinking? What is the point of training the body, taking in qi or what have you if you're just going to use a gun to shoot someone. Ruins the immersion.

Thank you very much. I did not realize you were not a native speaker, and came off harsher than I should have. I apologize for that. I look forward to your improvements, since your story is right up my alley :)

The grammar is absolutely horrible. It's broken english, and when I say broken, I mean utterly incomprehensible. They didn't even bother to capitalize a singular I. I'm giving the benefit of the doubt here since updates seem to be very consistent so far in hopes that this story drastically improves in the future. For the author, if you chance upon this, please either consider at least running your chapter/page through a grammar checker, or hire an editor. It will improve your quality of work significantly.