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I'm enjoying this book. at about chapter 250 the author makes a stupid mistake that makes me enjoy it less. the plot requires an addictive drug, and the author chose "hemp". you make rope out of hemp. it's related to marijuana and has some psychoactive components, but it's not addictive either and certainly doesn't kill people unless you hang them with a rope. the lack of basic research by the author makes it hard to suspend my disbelief and hope this episode passes soon. the author would have done better to choose something like cocoa leaf which can do all the things needed for the story line. other than this big gaping hole in the story it's been a fun read, but not a serious one. I Can ignore the stupid little things, but when it drives the whole plot it's distractingly stupid. overall the writing is good and I Like the characters and their development, pei gan and aunt luo are well developed side characters that are fully three dimensional. I think this author can be awesome with some judicious editing to remove or correct certain bad choices in the plot development.

I gotta admit having a hard time with this story. FL is stupid and annoying, not noble. It needs an editor. There's tons of stupid little errors and missing words and phrases. Some sections are disjointed like the court scene... "Wait, what? Who did that?" kind of scene confusion. There are some interesting plot components, like special abilities and a diversion from the "mate" trope common to most werewolf stories. The 2ML Channing reminds me of a goofy golden lab; most the secondary characters are caricatures, like the jail guard and his broken record threats... (yes, yes we get he's the bad guy, no need to bash us over the head with it). Sigh. It's decidedly a work in progress. Although an immature work, the author has potential. Many mistakes seem to be simply from a lack of an editor. When an author proofreads their own work they often overlook missing words or letters bc their brain knows what they intended, so it supplies it and they don't catch their own errors. Not trying to be harsh, giving critical feed back. I'm having difficulty developing an emotional connection with these characters. I dunno how far I will go with this book.

The world creation and language aren't bad or I would have given this one star. There's potential here but not without heavy editing

By chapter 28 I can no longer suspend my disbelief. The author is trying to write every Chinese romance novel ever written ... in one book. The FL is a genius hacker, genius Dr, photographic memory, super hot with a big rack, a poison master with hidden weapons, who happens to be reborn with knowledge of the future ...oh yeah and she's the CEOs love interest. It's so far diverged from reality it doesn't make for a good escape story... and really isn't that why we read novels? I can take a lot of improbable in a story, hence the OP character line up in my library, but this one is ridiculous to the point of distraction. If every story arc gets interrupted by the intro of some new almost magical skill, it ceases to be a fun trip for me. It's more like riding on the freeway with an idiot driver who gets on and off at every off ramp. I'm very sad, bc it started off interesting but it's getting dumber and dumber the further in I go.