Badges 7
Moments 176
2yr
Replied to rle8od nanatsu no taizai
ch 0 1 Fuck The Devils [1]
DxD - I am the Supreme Shadow Monarch. ( Hiatus )
Anime & Comics · Biggubosu
2yr
Replied to ruhe as far as I know
from reading other similar works
this confusion vibe in this type of a story if I even call that
its 1 due to The setup its confusing
2 authors writing skills being not Good enough
3 story Has nothing planned ahead and is written as you go
in these types of stories you have to carefully set everything up beforehand to make it work
But author here Has added Many things without much thought to be honest
made A jumbled mesh out of it and tried to work with it
The longer he will continue The more confusing it will Her simply cuz it wont be consistent
you can say that mc Has no character of its own
and The author copies responses from other characters and Then sets up a situation for those
like Seriously not much thought put in this story
I can write something better on my knee even though it wont be anything special
these bashing type stories I find really cringe
especially with author here going passively about it
Honestly to write more it would take too much Time so im gonna stop
but just this much is pretty much The tip of the problem
The only reason I read this was cuz of fou
it got me interested because its not something you see often
but Then I see A "human" fou
and am like
"really?"
but thats not enough
and The author had to go and make 2 similar reality marbles for different People
I dont even know nie to describe that
i can only say either author didnt know a thing about these things and went like
"I like it so im gonna give it to my characters because its cool / i want them to have it cuz its cool"
some responses about being Socially awkward and different
when you get different The moment u get A reality marble
only humans with metal problems can have A reality marble due to its nature
going by emiya example which author likes
he thinks of himself as A sword
and even if u watched only anime
he does give u some info about being mentalny unstable and barely working in normal Society
ugh thats enough
ch 12 Harry Potter: Book 1 Part 11 ("Conflict On the train")
Primate Murder Through a Multiverse
Anime & Comics · Geokit
2yr
Commented still waiting for that update even though years have passed
ch 30 NSFW Omake (part 1/4)
A Power Manipulator in DxD
Others · WatcherOfWorlds
2yr
Replied to Kwetzal_Lag do you really expect anyone to think deeply about what kind of kitchen knife The author was talking about when giving it as an example of sharpness?
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Danmachi - Tales of the multi talented Swordsman.
Anime & Comics · Fishball_22
2yr
Commented OOC Rias
its not bad
but i think this situation would be more fitting if a mature person like venelana gave some insight as to WHY
this situation happened
even grayfia would be better than rias
especially since rias couldnt even solve her peerage disfunctions and just left them be
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Issei The Perfect Being (Remastered)
Anime & Comics · AKIRA_0
2yr
Commented yes
its just like a kid throwing a tantrum
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Issei The Perfect Being (Remastered)
Anime & Comics · AKIRA_0
2yr
Commented srsly?
running tears?
it should be unreasonable
it should be anything but regret
anger
hatred
anything kind like "what do you know?"
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Issei The Perfect Being (Remastered)
Anime & Comics · AKIRA_0
2yr
Commented just dxd will be better
i dont think ure experienced enough to write something in depth as for example oregairu
its not easy
and an amateurish try is not really good enough to satisfy readers that want something more you know?
but i do want to see such interactions with the biblical god
it will be much more simple and easier to do
you can give it a try to see if u can do anything good with this situation
and then if u want u can write some social interactions like in oregairu
including the feels
cuz imo the only feels that are right
that match the situation is biblical gods description of mc
the rest is just so so
not good but not the worst either
Do you want me to write his dailylife in his normal world?
Omni-Being In DxD!
Anime & Comics · AKIRA_0
2yr
Commented regeneration maybe?
"Because I erased your self-healing power." explained Hiro.
Omni-Being In DxD!
Anime & Comics · AKIRA_0
2yr
Commented i hate it when you stop at such moments -.-
ch 678 The Expedition Team
Playing with other Supernaturals
Anime & Comics · Goyya
2yr
Replied to The_Sheep ive read sao A Long Time ago
so my memory is kinda funky in regards to that
But those levels around 10
were The point when levelling gets really hard
I mean if u did ur best and grinded The whole Month without rest you in theory should be capable of reaching around lvl 17
an average Player not beta tester and The best of those that grinded was around lvl 8-9 before fighting illfang
Green sheep in short
but damage is damage I suppose
Anyway
it doesnt mean much if those levels are wrong you know?
you can simply adjust The story or world to take that into account
like making some New enemies od grind spots
even A chapter with Agro informing about
changes noticed in places visited in beta
like stronger enemies specific areas with Many strong mobs
possible dungeons guarded by something
though I do suggest on improving The bits with that error as it was kind boring in my opinion
A let Down also
thought There would be something more
and ot just that Simple planted image that i now have
simply A bit more complicated than The situation u did
After a month, Rory is at level 26, she is probably close to Kirito's level, or maybe she is even in a higher level than him. Kirito may be playing solo and probably hunting all day, but like all other players, he ignores the most difficult missions, as they are the most dangerous, but they are also the ones that give the most XP.
Rory's Ascension
Anime & Comics · The_Sheep
2yr
Replied to The_Sheep thats wrong
remember its still 1st floor
as far as i know he was around 15
for sure below 20
i think he was lvl 13 before he fought illfang
the rest of players was around lv 10
After a month, Rory is at level 26, she is probably close to Kirito's level, or maybe she is even in a higher level than him. Kirito may be playing solo and probably hunting all day, but like all other players, he ignores the most difficult missions, as they are the most dangerous, but they are also the ones that give the most XP.
Rory's Ascension
Anime & Comics · The_Sheep
2yr
Replied to AshbornKRAVKE First of All
I regret ever writing anything
second
I wrote
IMO which stands for
in my opinion
next you did not understand anything that i wrote
for The parts of a magical girl giving hope
I didnt say u have to do it that way
And I do think of only giving hope as foolish
I made an example of what I personally view of that kind of magical girl
and made A point which you missed
that said u need to give it reason
as for your writing
even if your right (which ur not btw)
and I dont know how to write properly
Then at The very least I can compare your writing with that of other authors
So even if u take something from The novel and copy it Word for Word
which I believe not did not
unless its from an official Source
It may have grammar mistakes
if ur talking about that
because I was not talking only about that
as for your explanations in The comment
THAT should be written inside ur work
not in The comment section
if that is not an example of ur poor skills
Then I dont know what is
lastly
The Kids dying scene
if you think it was at least average in comparison no other fics
Then again ur mistaken
It was just so artifical so robotic
generic so unoriginal
if you wanted to make it Easy for yourself
you achieved that
in A bad way for The readers
Honestly if that is your reaction to A Guy talking you what you should improve on for your work to be better
Then all im doing is wasting my Time
on A last Note
if I wanted to see A story of my own making
I would write my own
A reader doesnt want to read something they expect
its boring
I want to be surprised as A reader
your work?
There is none of it
at The start I agree
I wasnt sure what to expect
First chapter I mean
maybe second
later on
a big dissapointment at best
once again not worth The effort
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Celebrities · AshbornKRAVKE
2yr
Commented improve your writing First
its terrible
I cannot understand what you want to say about half The Time
and just guess what is it that u wanted to write
as for Chant
cliche
generic
boring
cringe
everything in one
you force sacred gear Chants to something out of dxd
imo it is stupid
go for something unique
even if short
rather than copy what is already done
think of something New
I mean
What does A magical girl represent?
A virtue most cases
personally I like The Concept of magical girls fighting against all The odds with tears and blood on The ground
A single minded pursuit of what they cherish
be it giving hope to others
saving someone precious from despair
even if it is not something that person wants
doesnt matter what they want a magical girl will give Then what they need
in your story?
mc may as Well be a genderbend magician
Your mc doesnt represent anything
it exist and does things without reason
other than want (want and not desire)
a second serafall so to say
but imo
serafall is much better
that ur mc
at least she Has a goal
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Celebrities · AshbornKRAVKE
2yr
Commented personally I suggest to arrange it even by mc hand for issei to lose
that would force sirzechs to act
you can make A głów to his reputation by making it seem he is favouring rias and will force The matter if neccesary
in essence make sirzechs look stupid
play politics with him
and make A fool of him
To in The end Throw him A bone as A favour from Grigori which he will have to accept by saying that rias marriage mat be a politics move to gain some sway over The satan which is forbidden by The law
Or sth along these lines
one
u played The supernaturals
two
you gained A favor for The fallen
three
u helped issei
3 birds with one stone
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trololololl
Anime & Comics · CATastrophicWriter
2yr
Replied to dippmann this would be a scenario in A wishfulfilment story
just no
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trololololl
Anime & Comics · CATastrophicWriter
2yr
Replied to mikepeterjack that is an idea that can have bad results
what if some take it as A form of mind Control or something along those lines
description like he Has such an aura is for kids
normally u wouldnt act on it at most u will have A more favorable thoughts Her still be wary
oh Well it doesnt matter
ch 45 Mew meets Monsters? Pt. 2
The Journey of Mew
Anime & Comics · LaughingSnowFox
2yr
Commented not on The level of a childs writing But close
really
using incomplete dxd lore
only those parts that interested you
mistakes in General description of events
dialog plain boring without life
if There is anything that i Could possibly think as done A good Job on
Then I havent seen it
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The Supreme Being Of Highschool DxD
Anime & Comics · AKIRA_0
2yr
Commented yup
I knew There wouldnt be much
Her I still hoped to see Something interesting
sadly reality hit me once again and as I expected it was bad
but i did not expect The extent you managed to butcher this part to
ugh I regret reading this
ch 23 Sibling Meet Up / Depths of the Abyss
The Dragon's Little Sister
Anime & Comics · Firey_Spirit
PanKeRio
ch 0 1 Fuck The Devils [1]
DxD - I am the Supreme Shadow Monarch. ( Hiatus )
Anime & Comics · Biggubosu