Webnovel Author: silent_reaper333

silent_reaper333

2mth

Replied to Leon_Luis_

buddy having knowledge doesn't mean you can do anything that's what I hate about most fics they mention system gives him memory of certain skill and boom they're executing those moves like pro.... i mean what about muscle memory!?? are your muscles developed to move in that way knowledge needs to be practiced for any use otherwise it's useless that's why i added this sorry training arc of 6 months 😶‍🌫️

Reluctantly, Smoke agrees. The next few days are filled with grueling body conditioning exercises. Each morning, as the sun rises over the horizon, Smoke engages in intense workouts guided by the holographic projections of PLS. The rhythmic sounds of his punches and kicks echo through the lush forest, intertwining with the natural symphony of the island.

Naruto: A Twisted tale

Anime & Comics · silent_reaper333

silent_reaper333

2mth

Replied to Leon_Luis_

it's hinted in the further chapter what was hindering it... besides mc is currently weak why would he wanna mess up with something that's messing up THE SYSTEM... 😓 my mc or system won't have god complex thinking themselves omnipotent they will work and behave in a certain set of rules... I mean we're not animals here are we? we have to have rules 😐

Smoke: OKAY LET'S GO anyway. I am bored with this island already. There seems to be nothing here—rocks, forest, and animals!! I need to see HUMAN CIVILIZATION NOW…

Naruto: A Twisted tale

Anime & Comics · silent_reaper333

silent_reaper333

2mth

Replied to Leon_Luis_

I am a first time writer and honestly I was bored with the usual story where every character just pops up in a novel and starts training and boom in the next few chapters soloing the strongest character in the existence of the story... so i kinda skipped the normal training route and just have him body condition and move on to story 🤷

Reluctantly, Smoke agrees. The next few days are filled with grueling body conditioning exercises. Each morning, as the sun rises over the horizon, Smoke engages in intense workouts guided by the holographic projections of PLS. The rhythmic sounds of his punches and kicks echo through the lush forest, intertwining with the natural symphony of the island.

Naruto: A Twisted tale

Anime & Comics · silent_reaper333

silent_reaper333

1yr

Commented

great story author It feels fresh that someone has courage to write DBZ crossover without being sayian :3 Just a little advice about your story, it seems like a narration of events happening instead of an actual story try to write more character interactions give time to plat feels way to rushed like you're just skimming events... otherwise it's a great read keep up the good work ❤️

ch 11 CHAPTER 11 : READY FOR CHUNIN EXAMS

Naruto The Untouchable (Completed)

Anime & Comics · kamidemond

silent_reaper333

1yr

Commented

you planning on upgrading sharingan??? because I see a great opportunity here as sharingan is composed of yin chakra and senju was yen so when both were combined it transformed into rinnegan here as I remember this primordial dragon give yun che some high quality yang power so you can use this as a base to upgrade 🤷🏻‍♂️

ch 15 Fate

Itachi Uchiha in ATG

Book&Literature · Itachi90aizen

silent_reaper333

1yr

Commented

if you need to know everything in the world just spread the mobile phones and build an AI to Carter customer needs and also spy on every one secretly this way you won't have a problem of rebellion unless you build an Ultron 😅

ch 0 8 8 Planning

One Piece: Tech Genius

Anime & Comics · Lord_Sleepless

silent_reaper333

1yr

Commented

good story so far.... pace is also good... no need for that quick mastery bull***t and 10 year old fighting garp 😅😅 just a suggestion instead of going for every beast in anime verse just pokemon is sufficient you can also make him have a goal to start the great trainer age you spread pokemon across the world of one piece that'll be great story to read but if you already have plot in your head then go for it... My idea was just giving you a purpose for mc... ✌️✌️

ch 12 Reborn and A New Start

One Piece: Beastmaster

Fantasy · Hatake_Rhino

silent_reaper333

1yr

Replied to silent_reaper333

just don't make all affected be the good guys as that'll just destroy the charm of the story...

ch 0 5 5 A face that will urge men violence

One Piece: Tech Genius

Anime & Comics · Lord_Sleepless

silent_reaper333

1yr

Commented

jonin asking another guy to save his genin students?? 🤔

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silent_reaper333

1yr

Commented

great story so far author San... ❤️ the idea of fujitora and hidden stone village is refreshing 👌✌️ just wanted to say since you made your mc integrate with fujitora you should know how cool headed that old man is and your way of demonstrating your mc is hot headed which is totally opposite of fujitora he is fighting like he's the Chinese main character and the rest are canon fodders mind you that ATM he's the weakest in bunch 🤷🏻‍♂️ just work on it little bit since you just started writing it's reasonable but you can always improve keep up the great work 😁🤗