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Firstly, I think the bandit issue can be added a litttle more. Going by the flow that he was in a position of power for a long time(previously s rank,now a noble)etc to build more interaction? with the villagers Secondly, why was he so desperate to level up? Was it due to previous life issues? Due to bandit? Unused to weakness(trust issues)? Frankly theres still more room for development especially when the 'outside world(beyond the village) has not been covered. flow a little choppy but great so far^_^

See this! I just gifted the story: Balloon

Feels like the story is missing something

Nice story up to this point. But there are more stuff that can be covered to make the story more interesting. Things such as his motivations, setting etc. I think it will allow for more character development. For example when the bandits come to raid the village he was in I feel like he was disconnected from the incident like he didn't care or even if he did? idk Props to you for trying your best.[img=recommend] P.s I think it needs a unique selling point for this novel[img=update]