Nasir_Ahmed_3580 - Profile

By the way you talk I suppose this was all your 13 year old kid dream? Lets be honest you could have said bad plot, bad grammar, or bad writing etc by the way are you 14 now?

Want to encourage you to write more even through many things are going wrong in your writing but still you need to make story reasonable with uncertainty and unpredictable with a balance to entertainment.

Very good and fun but there are too many flaws in logic even based on the plot that is presented like at first aptitude and speed of upgrade, second his 3re friends who most of the time superior to him even their personality was always better than Mc, third AND most importantly there is no system or system administrator here this Genre is called "Game elements" or Just "SiFi" "Fantasy" though here there is no game because Nano tech and AI are not System, fourth logical errors in story pace and later it becomes too slow.

Please return I am very much missing you and your wonderful work! And hopefully you are well and safe please return🙏 I don't know when you will be back but I will wait.

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One thing is strange He become Hellmore family head he only has one family member his little brother it's funny because 2 person in a family to prosper is impossible so they add more memebers from outside not by marrying but via subordinates friends but... that's like a sect even clan has majority family memebers to call it a clan. Outsider are chief guests or workers.

It's strange that there will be no harem because ancient or cultivation family to prosper, to grow large they need descendents it was even normal in Earth to marry more than one but after 19th century it has changed. But in another worlds where there it is norm it feels weird that they try to be 20th century citizens while he becomes a sovereign the thought process of having marrying one comes in today's age because of laws, prospective, earnings. But it will be strange if that was in another world where there no such laws or story behind It's process. I also hate harem but in real world but if in this world there were clans sects kingdom it would also be strange if harem was illegal. Politicial marriage is bitter truth but reality even nowadays. Some novels shows even though mc is good handsome charming powerful he is not approached by girls, only fmc is allowed to do that. Even we leave that love is a phase of life we meet people we love but don't get love back and in the end some end up marrying some breaking up it's part of life.