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You’re the only one buddy, I’m not writing a novel, for the one person who likes that particular type, for free.

I’ve seen no-harem members complain but they’ve never spammed no harem in the reviews like the filthy harem readers much like yourself. Your novels are trash plain and simple, get off the site we don’t like you

How do you like a novel that’s advertised as non-human but he has a human form? That’s the dumbest plot ever, do you also like your romance novels to have no romance? Or maybe you like your transmigration novels to have no transmigration? See how stupid that sounds? If you make a non-human mc and advertise it as such, you keep it non-human.

odd, for me your message isn't there and this is what I see:

I understand that you've replied but then deleted your reply, is it possible for just a yes or no? I'd prefer to know this thing before I read a book, not just because of my dislike of the common troupe of fmc = yuri, because the story is vastly different with just that one addition.

Dude if you’re gonna be an idiotic harem lover atleast be able to make proper sentences. Nothing about the choices is a part of why I hate harems, you’re just used to being able to pick what girls you can use. You idiots always act like we’re mad about the women but also prove why we hate harems, because you just proved you view women as an object rather than a partner in a relationship

Crimson Monarch: Endless Journey and Naruto: Forced to marry Naruto’s mother at the beginning. Lying to an elder’s messenger and reading harem novels. Your fate is sealed

I see you’ve been reading harem novels. You’re no longer welcome in the no harem sect

This is one of those stories where the author doesn’t bother to write about the actual story until after premium chapters. We got 1 chapter of the mc before switching to another character until after the free chapters are done and the author can now get paid. Btw the excuse “background was important” is trash, I don’t remember much of the background you wasted our time with and I still followed the rest of the story. This is the trashy pay-to-win author type. Not worth ya time and or money/fast passes to read, poison tester has decided this is indeed poison

I don’t care if it’s bad, it could be one word per chapter but the fact it’s no harem and starts in dxd deserves a 5 star, people complain that because dxd is a harem story there should be harem yet they want mha harems, Naruto harems, marvel and dc harems, and other no harem stories to have harems. All them harem lovers that defend or ask for harem are part of the ever growing problem of webnovel. The brainless harem lovers don’t seem to realize it’s not their novel and have a million other trash(harem) to read on this site, click on a random book and odds are it’s harem, they have access yet they want more.

Of course, so here is my response and reply’s: First I am aware of Cruz being just a random male character, by controlling I meant Ragni immediately forcing them to act in ways they normally wouldn’t. I have read each chapter that was free beside the two unlock ones that are strewn in between(which I fast passed.) Second, I would suggest the app or website grammarly, the free version is great and the paid is extra. Third, I was talking about the scene/chapter after Ragni gets out of the hole, you had Ragni’s pov, the twins, and the attacker. It comes across more repetetively when you space them across different chapters. Lastly, what I mean by “the main character seemingly changes, that or we get a new character out of the blue” is that when you went to switch pov’s you didn’t give us a clear warning, it was also never communicated that were multiple Leads. Something like changing i between them during the traveling in the wild, it would be easier to ease the leads together and we wouldn’t be thrown into a different setting in the blink of an eye. The main issue of the multiple leads is that while it’s cool to have multiple, a good amount was purely the twins and ragni, time passed, training with Ragni, stopping in town, finding a tattoo on Ragni. So if you were reading this, what you would see is a bunch of chapters being purely about the 3 present leads and then out of nowhere a day passes and we have new leads for some reason and the twins are gone for awhile. There was no clear knowledge of the multiple leads or pov switches and it just seemed thrown together. The multiple leads and the multiple perspective viewpoints don’t have a warning or any indicator. A good example would be:[attacker] POV. You put that in the same chapter of the other pov and then we have clear knowledge that there’s a switch in pov’s

Quick question, is this yuri? I’m hoping not but if you could just let me know that would be nice

It’s an alright novel, good idea and execution. The world is set out great. A few problems though, the male lead is honestly a little too controlling. The twins are nice. I’m gonna be honest, while I enjoyed the book, it’s not worth paying money, the sentence structure, grammar, and chapter setup is bad, one scene repeated twice, went to a different scene, then repeated the scene and finally moved on. Constant misspellings and the main character seemingly changes, that or we get a new character out of the blue. So I’d give most of it 5s besides writing quality, story development, and obviously update stability. I’d suggest if you’re looking for a random novel to just check out for 40 chapters read it, but if you’re looking for a novel worth investing your time and or money then find something else. Great story but I also have to be fair here

I would call it more of a far off comparison, I don’t mean for it to be 1:1 but more to guide you to the scope of my point. You say that you’re trying to write about the experience of someone thrown into a monsters body but you basically made him get rid of it day 1 in hogwarts. I don’t mean this to be rude but you do understand you can’t view the experience of a dog if they get memory wiped and then become invisible. This is what I mean, you wanted in your words to view the experiences of an unfortunate man forced into another world with the body of a monster, nice idea! But you set his goal to be invisible and completely become a normal guy in the world. That doesn’t sound like the experience of a guy turned into a monster and having to navigate life, it just sounds like a guy getting sent to the world as a nonhuman, then hiding away until he becomes a human again. You might find your world perfect but the words you’ve said completel go the opposite way. The way you see it is of a guy’s experience as a monster but others see it as a guy hiding and then becoming a human again to finish off the story. Not to mention you messed up the actual enderman rage part, the whole meaning of enderman’ stage is to kill whoever has seen it, but he somehow gets calmed down after he killed an entire village of spiders brutally. Anyways, I don’t mean anything rude by this but this story is just his journey to becoming human again. Since I’m here I’ll tell you the 3 category’s for bad additions to novels(not saying yours is bad just had a bad addition): The returning to being a human category, the going back to earth category, and the harem category.

He basically goes invisible day one of hogwarts. I don’t like novels that have the mc have a goal to become human. It doesn’t matter if he doesn’t look human at the moment, the second the mc wants or finds a way to become human again the non-human is ruined. Authors use excuses like he will have to work for it and can only get it at the end. We didn’t come here for the mc to hate himself, we came here to read an enderman, we got scammed. It doesn’t matter how far in the future he gets one, he’s still not as advertised. Tell me author, since you’re invested in my review enough to reply to it, what would you feel if you’re reading a novel about this great spellcaster who you watched grow up from novice to the God of spells, suddenly decide near the end to give up everything. Would you enjoy to know that the figure you enjoyed watching foresakes his very existence? Would you find that interesting? Would you be excited to read someone give up what made the story unique? That leads to my next question, author, why did you make him an enderman in the first place? You’ve basically made him an invisible hydrophobic teleporting mage. Does that sound like the synopsis at all?

The one thing that mattes the most of a nonhuman fanfic/story is keeping the mc nonhuman. Ya see, changing your mc into looking like or being human-like is the bane of any good nonhuman novel. We didn’t come her to find a human, we didn’t come her to find a half-nonhuman, the one thing we came for and was assured of in the synopsis is the nonhuman part. Now that you know why your readers bothered to open the novel, we get to the reason this novel is terrible. Mind you this could be the most well written novel in all of history but it’d still be trash. You turn your mc human-ish and remove the part and staple point for the creature you based it off. He’s no longer an enderman, he’s just a transformed human. You didn’t give the viewers a good reason to stay. You remove the looks, remove the preset expectation, and then you moved on. You said enderman and you removed the enderman. I know you’re gonna look at this and wonder why I’m not reviewing the rest of the story but honestly this one point completely overshadows any other complaint. You can’t create a novel about let’s say a dragon, then remove the dragon and move on with the novel. That’s not how stories work. Now I don’t like harem novels at all, think they’re about as useless as the people who read it(completely background side-characters) but I’d rather read that abomination of a disease that plagues webnovel than read this. This is like those gta 5 YouTubers who say “like and sun for a giveaway” but never give the stuff away, you said enderman in the synopsis but 20ish chapters in he’s no longer enderman. He doesn’t have the iconic look of an enderman and he removed the main standing point that Minecraft gave that species. Just write a normal HP fanfic and don’t label it as something you never follow through on. 5 -> 3 -> 1 -> 1 -> 3 on the ratings bottom to top