Webnovel Author: YoruOtreu - Novel Collection

I really really love this story. It’s worth reading so much. The Art is amazing and the story is so wonderfully crafted with amazing dialogue.

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Thank you so much. I’m happy that you enjoyed it! 😊

Good story. I really like the characters and the story, it sort of reminds me of an anime. You can tell you enjoy writing. There are a few mistakes here and there but it doesn’t really detract from the story. Keep working hard!

The story is quite humorous and I think your writing style fits quite well with it. The plot also seems very interesting and I’m already forming theories on as to what is actually happening. I enjoy how blunt the main protagonist is. My one and only recommendation would be that in the earlier chapters the main character would have a thought and then repeat the exact same thing out loud. Sometimes this works but since he’s saying it out loud I find it better to just have the dialogue and add on top of it with the thoughts. Other than that I think you’re doing a good job. I look forward to the author continuing the story.

I love this so much. The drawings are so beautiful and the writing is quite good. You can see the hard work you put into it. Amazing work! Looking forward to reading more.

Thank you very much. I will take it in account and do some editing. 😊 I appreciate it a lot.

I really enjoyed reading it. The story is fast paced, slightly too much at the beginning for my liking but I dont think there is anything wrong with that since it suits the tale. The writing is really good and creates a vivid world, making you feel for the character when he loses his sibling. I look forward to reading chapters further down the line.