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Hm... It's hard to review the book at the least. The grammar is chunky and may set readers like me off. I am not very strict for grammar and style, but I just can't vibe with a story written with poor or not good grammar. I may sound harsh, and maybe the author is a second, heck a third language English speaker, but I don't want to give a crappy review with no hint of your weak points. I would give you the advice to use Proaid, though it isn't best, it would make the lines much less chunky. I found a ton of redundant words, which could have been easily fixed. The second thing that turned me off while reading was too much vague description or style. Let me be clear, it is not likely for me to read romantic novels, and I stumbled on this while scouring the forums. But, a plus one to the author or making me stick till the end. So, the style was too abnormal for me. At multiple times, I had to re-read the same paragraph to understand the context. Third, the random flow of tense. The tense change was too erratic. And personally, there were quite a few times, I would have preferred changing the tense to past. So, I can't think of anything else to criticize, or maybe I can.... So if you have reached this far, then congrats on reading a long-ass review. So, the plot was fairly good in the first chapter. I have not read any further chapter, as I said before not my cup of tea unless it's harem. I love cliches. While some parts were breathtaking at most, the other was Meh! At the best. The last few paragraphs didn't make any sense, at least to me. Ugh... I shouldn't have started this review.... My hands are hurting. So, the plot is good, but I know jack about the world., one can counter me by saying Noob, it's just the first chapter. Yes, the story may later explore deeper, but I didn't know jack of the setting. Indeed I knew it was a royal setting with Emperor and queen, but not much to help my brain visualize anything or dive deeper into the world. I think I am repeating my words so I would end the review here. Lucky you, you all are exempted from reading any more crappy review from a random guy. So my advice to the author. Don't give up... Your plot is good, for the first few starting paras, I was able to visualize the scenes, but later I couldn't due to poor grammar, which is mostly because of the lacking style and fast pacing. If you don't like this review, don't accept it. Take it with a grain of salt, and use it to analyze yourself. I am no human, but I do make mistakes and have a preference. And improve as much as you can. Try till you get it is my motto. Well, Adios...