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I don’t know if you will see this review or not, Goyya-san, but I am still going to put this out here. I am a big anime fan, a big bleach fan and I absolutely love that someone wrote an amazing fanfic with kisuke as the mc. Dream come true man. But as they say with expectations comes disappointment. I have read this fanfic twice and I have already caught up. Before I release my frustrations in a spoiler rich manner let me talk about the good points: 1. The character development is nicely done 2. The story is very smooth 3. World building is also fantastic From here on are my frustrations which are very logical and relevant, so please do go through them author-san SPOILER ALERT 1. Kisuke’s energy (the combined new energy which is of a higher tier) has been very very underutilized. This is honestly a crime. 2. Kisuke’s character development other than romance aspect has been abysmal, eg him underestimating almost everyone despite repeatedly getting burnt. 3. All other characters are becoming OP while it looks like kisuke has completely stagnated - eg claire breaking through Kisuke’s defenses so damn easily (I know her concept is broken but this point ties into my point number 1, kisuke is inherently using a higher tier of energy, he should be highly resistant to all forms of damage unless the attacks are fueled by energies of same or higher level than his) Honestly I would not write so much unless I really love the work. So please author-san do think about what I wrote.

Author san I have really enjoyed this novel but you repeatedly keep kieran’s schedule very tight to ensure a fast ish pace of the story. Though fun, please be careful when in the future the pace might have to slow down, the contrast is very jarring and really messes up the smoothness of plot progression and reading experience

Just take note that you don’t create an mc with a saviour or hero complex, they are a real turn off especially for experienced readers, otherwise as long as you continue to improve and accept constructive criticism then this novel will go far. 🍺

Author san first of all total respect for ch 130s (hope you get the msg), they truly show how deeply you thought about them. Now for the review (at ch 136): The start will FEEL complete shit (till about 50 ish chapters) but it is absolutely critical for the world building so power through guys. After that, the fun begins. The mc is not perfect and his path is not perfect. Big plus point. The side characters and the world building are amazing, kudos author san. This novel is one of better ones when it comes to balancing VR and reality, another big plus point. Lastly there is a joy in reading this novel which makes it a lighter read on the mind. A definite recommendation from my side, keep going author san and please don’t drop it.

The first thing - author has done justice to the title. I haven’t read any racing books but I feel that as long as a person has a basic idea about racing, cars and various manoeuvres then - you are in for a treat. Side characters - well fleshed out and not just add ons. They have their own story. The mc - amazingly created because his personality and goals appear to a product of his experiences and not just for the sake of the plot. World building - it’s a huge world that the author has created and it isn’t static. It is dynamic and doesn’t just wait for the mc to create events and this shows how ‘alive’ the characters are. Lastly the plot - simple but strong. Instead of the climax or something else, actually going through the plot is much more fun, though it may change looking at how grand the world structure is. Kudos to you dear author, just don’t drop the novel and it will truly be one of the best online novels out there, I am 100% certain.

Yo dear author, I know that you must have some plan in mind but till ch 255 Elliot seems completely inept with runes. So I hope you have a plan for that coz him learning runes (which would be so slow that it would destroy this amazing pace of the novel) would not be viable. So hope you have some sort of a plan

Personally for me it is a near perfect novel. Reasons are 1. The smoothness of story progression 2. Characters - very realistic and well thought 3. Action scenes are nicely done 4. There is a strong sense of purpose in whatever actions the protagonist and side characters perform SPOILER BELOW For the author - I understand why the three energies can’t mix and fuse but desmond being so overwhelmingly talented can’t he use mana as the primary energy, ki or aura for body strengthing and lastly arcanum for the mind/soul. Please think about it dear author, once again absolutely love your work🔥

So far around ch420, I must say that it is an amazing novel. The pacing and intricacy is top notch and the fight scenes are detailed. SPOILER below (and appeal to author)!! I have to say that I really really want theo to obliterate his “family”. Dear author you have successfully pierced my heart. Please give all readers a satisfactory arc, I believe u get my gist?

I don’t have a strong interest in netori but I checked out this novel when I saw netori mixed with r18 and harem. I got curious and let’s just say I found something amazing. The protagonist or rather the classmate A is a very special character. His classmates are also very well crafted. The author has amazingly combined desire, human psychology and a pinch of tragedy and created something very very special. This novel looks very plain and a desire fulfilling story on the surface, but it has much more substance and depth to it than most novels. All in all don’t stop writing author san, you are doing a freaking good job here.

Author sama my man. You are writing one of the best novels I have ever read and I have read nearly a hundred novels. The balance between lemons and plot progression is impossibly exquisite, which I frankly didn’t think was possible. No matter what happens, no matter how much time you need to recharge your creative juices - don’t ever friggin drop this piece of art. You are creating history !!

I don’t know why this novel is relatively unknown. A normal-ish MC who is relatable and has just the right amount of awkwardness is the perfect recipe for awesome character development. And that does happen - everything is relatable and fantasy like. The story keeps you hinged but never overwhelms. Lot of fun and expecting even more!!

I have read nearly a hundred novels of all the various genres. But this one right here takes the cake in urban system based novels section. Its not just good, it is beyond that. A steady pace with a relatable MC and a good dose of comedy. HATS OFF!!!!

PLEASE dear author, don’t forget about combat standards just because of mana. Otherwise the story is really really well thought and has good structure. JUST DON’T FORGET about combat standards, your unique perspective is awesome.

A very interesting novel. Very fast paced and ends up being slightly chaotic but overall it is fun to read. Don’t expect proper english and also don’t expect the mc to be a “man”. Just remember that the story is lighthearted and fun to read.