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the thing is it is possible to do that exactly in the first 4 to 5 chapters Not only do you have to do that all in one but in bits adding mystery. That will maybe sound harsh but give me one good reason why I should continue reading a book that lacks originality. with an MC that seems to switch personalities every time he talks. My last hint for you is to start by first finding out who your character is and start living it. Heck maybe get into science labor and ask some people. Don't focus on shitting out two chapters per day and focus on the Character and the world. if you ain't still 12 year old stop making excuses like that. Long enough on webnovel and I heard it all.

ok I don't even know where to start. I saw that my favourite author recommended your book. I found myself engaged initially, but I must admit that a few aspects left me slightly concerned. The chapter dedicated to the MC backstory for instance, felt somewhat cringe worthy that you separate it from the book. Then the decision to have the character leave his parents due to financial concerns despite their investment and hopes for return, struck me a bit abrupt and lacking in depth. It might be beneficial to explore more nuanced reasons that could justify such a significant choice.Furthermore while the notion of the main characters concern about dying a Virgin added an element of Humor to the story, I couldnt't help but feel that it overshadowed any potential for emotional depth. Balancing humor with genuine emotional development is challenging.As i continued reading, I couldn't help but notice some similarities between the subsequent chapters and pupulare reincarnation novels. While inspiration from successful works can certainly be beneficial, it's crucial to maintain a unique voice and narrative to avoid giving the impression of recycling ideas.

hard to rate with just one chapter but you got me hooked the writing quality is better then most shit you can read here so thx for that

The writing quality sadly sounds like a 12 year old who just learned about it in school. You also try to hard to recreate typical manga or anime scenes. Another good hint of mine would be to let your readers use their brains a little you don't have to describe everything. Fighting scenes in 3 person is ok if you can pull it off. A fighting scene needs to give you goosebumps as if you yourself would be in the fight. Quality before quantity! Redo your early chapters please!

The story is rather promising but please before you continue writing your chapters overwork your former ones. Correct wrong written words and your gramma.There are on mass of free online tools who would help you improve the quality.

nothing new of an idea and compared to some of your otjer books its rathwr dissapointing in your writing style[img=faceslap]..................

good start and nice different approach with the systhem but the storry is full of holes and mistakes initself. author maybe reread your own storry

it would he such an amazing storry sadly covered in a lot of mistakes also the writting quality could improve alot. i know all dou athors somehow wanna make money with your books,as i also follow you and your books for along time. If you really wanna one day get out of webnovel and get a bigger author i onöy have one hint for you QUALITY OVER QUANTITY!

The beginning started rather smoothly and nice but then it's a rush in turning the Mc into an OP Character with lot of holes missing key parts for the storry sadly also nothing new compared to other storrys

At the beginning I kind of thought here we go that might be another vampire system story but I still wanted to give it a chance and I am glad I did so as the book proved me wrong beginning was rather interesting and has nothing to do with vampires but sadly it's still not for me as it's seems to have a lot of writing holes and also a little less information about the system like when he gains exp how much he needs to lvl up and why doesn't he check all the quest tabs or does he? But still he has also a good character development going on that is realistic to what the Mc went trough. Although the way he gets bullied even thought he seems to be rather smart and that the world won't accept him is not reasonable specially as there are people without power. So maybe take some time I wish you good luck with your book.