Webnovel Author: 87w - Novel Collection

Thank you so much for the honest review!! the shift from first to third-person point of view sure is quite random, I might try to not shift too much on later chapters. lots of typos, I might wanna look back at the earlier chapters. I'm glad you like the story and the characters! if you can feel the emotional moments in my story, it mean I managed to achieve what I want this story to be! I like sad stories lol

Here is my honest review, I hope it could be useful! Flow: Is very good, I can keep reading it without stopping. Normally I often caught myself getting distracted or overwhelmed with wall of text, but this one didn’t make me feel that way. It’s really good! Grammar: Is very good! No noticeable error so far. You didn’t use any difficult to understand word which is a huge plus. Poetic sounding difficult words sounds good but my mind having difficulty processing it and often I got distracted, so I’m glad you’re only using easy and familiar words. Humor: An overall fun to read humor! There are some moments that might be better portrayed without emoticon tho, for the sake of seriousness. Example was in chapter 4 when protagonist met the purple eyed guy and felt an ache on her chest. Character: Protagonist is both fun and relatable. Also, I like how you made the issue in protagonists life more apparent rather than just mentioning it. Example is in chapter 4 when she saw her dad’s car and there’s a note to tell her ‘don’t use the car, btw, have a good day!’ It really emphasise that her relationship with her father had quite a problem. I know it’s mentioned in chapter 1 that they had grown apart due to some reason, but showing it in events like in chapter 4 made the experiences more engaging! Tone: Chapter 1 had a sad and serious tone, so the sudden tone change into humor in chapter 2 kinda caught me off guard. But it’s totally ok and nothing wrong with it. Personal: 1. The random emoticons are really cute! 2. Protagonist is very emotional. I like emotional protagonist because reading about their feelings is very fun! Bonus points if it’s relatable.