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GodsAre_Stupid

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Hmm, I read this and still found many mistakes. Here are some --1. Again, the characters are way too human-like. You need to make robots like robots, pieces of walking metal.(But then this could be contradictory to the "emotions" shown by Optimus in the movies) and if you were to add emotions to the robots, make it more....robot-y? If you want to know what I meant by robot-y, I'm taking reference to the movies. 2. Your timeline in this seemed confusing to me. I have no idea what's happening and when and how. For a reader, you should make it extremely, extremely clear about all these details, because remember, they aren't reading the novel in the way you would read and imagine it.3. The details. For example, in this chapter you introduced the concept of currency. Well , instead of just writing "paid me", explain it like - "he paid me and at the corner of my vision, I saw the icon of [currency name(better to keep one)] and the amount next to it. Satisfied, (one person, could be you or someone else) left." You get what I'm trying to say?😅😅And after writing each chapter, re-read your written chapter 2 or 3 times before publishing it. This allowed me to get a perspective of a reader and to rectify any mistakes I made in my novel. Most important is, let your creativity flow, write it down, let the world know it, and enjoy making new worlds of your imagination. 😁😁Btw, I'm curious, if you don't mind me asking, are you in school, college, job, or a retired person? 😅😅 I keep thinking abt my readers because it's basically a random person's(me) book being read by random people, and I'm kind of a curious about my readers sometime😅
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Hey, saw your comment. Just wanted to say it is nice to see someone writing a transformer fan-fic as well!!Now, my opinion for this novel is, that it isn't good enough. This is what I thought from reading the first chapter -1. Your pace is wayyyy too fast. Try to slow it down.2. The details about everything(environment, characters, the world) are not complete. Give more importance to details compared to content size. Always remember, quality over quantity any day(I kept this as my motto when I was writing my novel😅😅).3. I am not much qualified to say this, but your characters feel more human than robots, if you get what I mean. 4. Since you have also adopted a system for your novel, best to explain more about it in detail. For example, explain how the system activated, the functions and all. 5. Give depth to your characters(another mistake I made when I was writing my novel).Do not be sad or disappointed by your book. I know how hard it is to start a novel and be loyal to it and your readers. It takes dedication, creativity, and most importantly, discipline. Take this book as a stepping stone, learn from it, and make the changes. Then let me know about it and I'll come back here again. Remember, quality over quantity. Let the chapter take time to finish and even though you will be suffering right now(due to lack of dedication and creativity and time stress), in the future, your path will be brighter. Better to suffer now than later no?😉😉
GodsAre_Stupid
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Replied to CrimsonPX1
Really? Can you send the links here, if you don't mind? Thanks in advance!

Sixth, I do not know when I would start my new novel since I have zero clue how long it will take to read all the comics and all, but I will make an another chapter like this to introduce you guys to my new transformers fan-fic.

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

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Replied to Death_Lotto
😅😅😅

[From lowest to highest they are - F, E, D, C, B, A, S, SS, SSS, X]

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

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I don't know....but I guess its fun to watch your fav movie again🤷‍♀️

Avery was walking home under the moonlight. He was holding all the Transformers movie series CDs in a packet tucked under his right arm. Today was the day he was going to have an all-nighter and see all the Transformers movies the tenth time.

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

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Replied to techlover64
well, the "Universal" in the Universal Serial Bus did mean something huh....

"Transform your hand by imagining it as a USB form and insert it into the USB port. The screen has the knowledge on whatever you need except for confidential matter."

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

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Replied to Jayxen
cough! one minute...lemme re-write this...
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Replied to Jayxen
wait...really?
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The two Aerilians came from left and right and swung their blades towards Night Shadow's head and legs respectively. Night Shadow jumped forward and transformed into a human. Time seemed to have stopped as Night Shadow transformed into a human. Because his human body was small, he passed through the gap between the two blades.

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

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Replied to Jayxen
you want him to get black eyes? hmm....i'll see abt that😁😁

It took him another day to absorb all the crates. Night Shadow felt everything around him became much more clear. His eyesight(his eyes are purple color), hearing became sharper, and his radar could search for more far places. Night Shadow felt as if got enlightened and experienced rebirth.

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

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Replied to YogSothoth805
what do u mean?🤔

Night Shadow nodded and said, 'System, deconstruct all the bricks and start replacing them with the Cybertronian Osnium in my body'

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

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Replied to Scorp_Claw
lmao😂😂 nice one

Before Night Shadow could tell anything, Deus said, "Your wish was quite a surprise to us. After all, hardly any bot knows about Energon, much less Rarified Energon. We will give your prize but I would like to know, where did you get to know about Rarified Energon?"

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

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Replied to Scorp_Claw
😅😅well, the man gotta be cautious

The door opened sideways and something went rushed towards Luxtr and hugged him. Night Shadow became cautious and almost killed the person, but after seeing who it was, he stopped. Hugging Luxtr's legs was a girl. The girl looked around 5 or 6 years old, had shiny brown hair and green eyes, fair skin, and a small petite body.

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

Reincarnated Into A Transformer In Cybertron With A System

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