Kimberly_Erasmus

These kids were so fortunate and so ungrateful they complained about everything in life, including the school bus that came to pick them up by the doorstep.

Kimberly_Erasmus

2yr

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great storyline

ch 0 4 Chapter Three

Kimberly_Erasmus

2yr

Commented

uncomfortably comfortable

Diah is blushing, shall I go dish the food for us says Scott, "I do not mind serving"says Diah, "Ok, then go for it says Scott."

Jamie closed the curtains and started unpacking all her clothes and hanging them up at least "I have my own private space", she thought to herself as she changed to something more comfortable, her room was right beside the bathroom

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Realistic · Legacy_za

Kimberly_Erasmus

2yr

Commented

creep

Jamie now walked over to the window as she saw by the opposite house is a boy staring out the window to her room.

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Realistic · Legacy_za

Kimberly_Erasmus

2yr

Commented

I don't like his character

Jamie could somehow sense this guy is not who he pretends to be; he is trying to impress her mother. Finally, the reindeer moved as Jamie noticed his hand on her mother's lap. Love is blind, and I guess she said to herself. "She looked very awkward at first and became more comfortable as they drove up the mountain after that."

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Kimberly_Erasmus

2yr

Commented

so this is basically the getting to know Scott scene

ch 0 3 Chapter Two

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Realistic · Legacy_za

Kimberly_Erasmus

2yr

Commented

winters in UK is freezing

No, not always it is just now winter, but you will get used to the weather. Jamie looked in the mirror and glanced at him smiling, and we were almost there. Ladies, I am sure you must be freezing up. I just asked if it is always this cold.

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Realistic · Legacy_za

Kimberly_Erasmus

2yr

Commented

Scott is at least what?

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Realistic · Legacy_za

Kimberly_Erasmus

2yr

Commented

Scott sounds like a interesting character

The English they spoke sounded different, across there was a bald white guy a bit chubby and about five foot nine, he was wearing glasses and he had a clean shave, wearing a leather jacket and a blue Jean he smiled and walked over to them, there was awkwardness between her Mom and this guy as they both tried to hug but looked around nervously, Jamie was now fourteen years old and found her mothers taste in men odd, Jamie gave a fake smile as Scott introduced himself, It is good putting a picture to a voice he said, her Mom was way younger than this guy he looks like he was in his mid-fifties,