Webnovel Author: Omnitheus - Novel Collection

Rating it with 5/5 Writing quality - I found minimal to none issues with writing that could be fixed with self proofreading. Really, it actually looks like it was written by someone using English as their first language. I would recommend though putting colors using figures of speech and idioms since it is set in a modern world. Maybe some pop reference to get a zeitgeist and comparison on the leads to actual people. Updates - can't complain. Quality > Quantity Story Dev't - The exposition of characters, to me, is a bit too long. The first two chapters should make or break whether the author could keep a reader hooked. I would recommend straying from too much info at the beginning. Since the author uses omniscient 3rd party writing, he/she could in corporate expositions within scenes to justify an act. Too much of the setting right at the start could easily go stale and readers want to read fiction and think. Make them. Character design - Both were well thought of like the author has actual knowledge or experience of the professions the characters have. All in all, with a few modification with the writing style, it could be narrated better, especially that this is told in two perspectives which should make it interesting. See more of your writings around.

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Author here, guys. This is posted August 18, 2021. Due to an infringement dispute that I have with a particular seller in Amazon who tries to monetize my work by printing hard opies, I'm slowing my releasing of chapters to twice a week on weekends so this pirate can no longer steal my work as we resolve this. Thank you for your support.

Thank you so much good sir!

Wow! I'll be sure to keep meeting and beyond your expectations!

I purposely strayed from the usual light / web novel story telling style. Hope you liked it. ;)

Thank you good sir!

Wow! I do hope that too. Thanks for your support!

Thank you kindly for your support and review!!

It's my second time reviewing it after reading through 23 Chaps :) Good improvement with the writing quality. Most lapses have been cleared which improved the readability. Reason why I don't binge-read it is because updates are quite slow the past days. I understand the author needed to clean up and edit the pats chaps so that's good enough and am sure can bounce back to more stable updates. Story development was a little slow-paced at the start but it became thrilling in the middle part around Chap 12. That's where most actions happen. I noticed the flashback with the other character was for the purpose of narration. I would recommend though to introduce flashbacks only when the story plot requires it so the reveal would have a stronger impact. World BG so far is so good. Author is able to connect the broad fantasy world. That's challenging following a monarch style world. Keep it up!

Oh, I see. Looks like you're aiming for a literary piece rather than a novel/light novel. Good work!

Overall, this has a rich story to tell and broad plot given its title and theme. World Background is good. It's difficult to create your own universe especially with supernatural beings. Author did a great job with constructing his universe. Story is fast-paced. It has a strong first chapter and the preceding chapters had a lot of action, as in fighting action which was narrated in good detail. Character design though could be a bit stale at times. There was a difficulty in the distinction of characters. Introduction of characters could be improved when they have a unique distinction. In an omniscient POV style writing, only the author's thought of the character is perceived so it's quite a challenge. Writing quality overall is good. I like the play on words, a romanticist style but not too much. Exposition is just right in each chapter to put the vibe of the setting. Only issue I found was sometimes, since there are many characters, it's difficult to follow what's going on. Tip on this, even if it the POV was from the author, you can put yourself in the main character or main POV (in that chapter), that way, readers can perceive the things in the story, the way that character does. Also helps with character design disctinction. I don't have a problem with update stability as long as the chapters are of good quality. Keep writing!

Thank you kindly! Though it would've been helpful if you pointed out to which part I didn't get that 5 star for future progress. XD. Thanks again!

Rating it 5/5, review after finishing all 6 chapters. The poetic writing style in first person is refreshing to see in a myth based story. It creates dynamics as the MC's POV will give you a detailed exposition. It has minimal lapses which didn't really affect the readability. I must say, I don't exactly know what's the right pace for a romance story but I think the pacing was just right. There's still a lot of questions revolving the MC, like why was she helped by that voice in the first place? I'd like to see how the author will bridge that mystery. While the MC's character is well detailed, it sometimes took off the characteristic of other characters. The side characters sometimes lack distinction. One good way to make other characters stand out is to give them mannerism or give the MC a unique perspective of that other character. I like Greek Myth so I would be kinda bias when I say I liked it. Thought I'm not into too much romance stories, fictional stories based on Myths really catches my eyes, as it interests me how the author would employ the existing myths to his/her own universe. Good job!

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