Slightly_Average - Profile

Overall, I rate this is an Okay/excellent. Unlike 98% of all books here is not pure garbage, but it also isn't what I'd consider a top tier book. So I'll break it down. Writing Quality: It's pretty alright, the author has wrote 200 sum chapters with pretty decent writing. I've read so many garbage books that I sort of auto-correct bad grammer, spelling and punctuation, unless it's really bad and it trips me up. So depending if you're similar, then I don't think there's anything to noticeably egregious. That being said though, it is very apparent that the writing is kind of amateurish in how it's written, which depending on how high quality books you read is quite apparent. Updating Stability: ...I don't really care about this one so it's a free 5 star. Story Development: It's pretty stable, it doesnt seem to be in standstill and you can see progress being made, should some of them. It's not totally perfect though. Character Design: I gave this a hard 2 stars. The character itself is pretty alright he's not my standar "likable" but I think he's pretty alright, but the thing that bogs everything down mostly is his backstory conflicting with how the author portrays him and how he actually is as the story is progressing. It is very apparent that the author has no idea of gang/mafia/whatever culture , and that's not the fault of the author. But, what happens is instead of the the Mc being shown and written as a thug, it's just seems like an impersonator. At the very beginning of the the story, it says, "He passed by his underlings as he walked. They were bowing their heads in respect" ....yeah, no. This isn't the office, This isnt the medieval/kamakura ages, he is not the boss, and he's not a drills sergeant. What the author wrote makes the reader envision of the mc walking by and his peers (lower ranking but the mc himself is still a goon), going out of their way to bow to him as he walks by. I think a better way of doing this would be to write of them going of of his way or saying a word of acknowledgement as he walks by. Also another thing the whole "thug accent" ...what? That's not a thing, what is that. Unless, it's a area where the majority of the populous have formed the own semi-language with different things, it doesn't make sense. Even then if they were to go to another country the inhabitants are not going to thing it's a "thug accent" they'll be like "that's a Russian accent", "Asian," etc etc. I think your missed opportunity that you should've grasped is establishing he talks in a blunt, rude, and rough manner with no care about using honorifics. Another problem is he's SUPER SUPER passive in attitude. It's understandable and good writing if you write how he struggles between his casual answer attitude and personality and now having to be civil (which I think the author tried to do, just not well), but you're not going to tell me this something year old (Author really should've established Mc's age), is going to bow because a young arrogant PEER (who is really not a hotshot in the established lore, at least if he is I missed it) just because the person said "why aren't you bowing." That is absolutely horrible meshing of his supposed lore and how he acts. As for the rest of the characters, they are mostly 1 dimensional with the biggest downfall of author writing them in the generic way of them being anime characters, and not really as if they're real people. I.e. the child and grandma when he was forced to babysit. Overall, the lore for the character doesn't fit. I'd recommend taking inspiration from Mercenary Enrollment, Gokushufudou: The Way of the Househusband, Yukuzas Guide to Babysitting, Bully in charge, and Lookism for a thug personality that also fits into the theme of the book (if the author ever decides to rewrite the whole thing I guess...) World Background: Its okay, like I put above there's some conflicting tones of the gangsters side of the plot, the whole Idol thing seems well done, the settings and events seem done well enough, etc. General thing really holding it down at all is a bit of amateurish writing. That and I also find it weird how everyone amd their dogs apparently pays attention Idols but whatever. One major complaint I do have is the whole Boss Plot twist. The plot twist absolutely wrecks the believability of established elements and frankly makes not sense. Miscellaneous: Let's talk about the system. My opinion? Horrible, absolutely horrible. Besides the whole "sentient, but with an attitude" which is a something I instantly dislike in and of itself UNLESS and ONLY don't mine when done by DarkWolfShiro, it really could've been done better. While this story doesnt need a "Strength:8, Vitality: 6" system, and the The stats the author does use is fitting, it is too static. The Mc gets 3 mission, he cannot change it he cannot get any points unless he does them, nor can he forfeit them. There's also the problem that it's not really well established. The first time it's introduced the Mc asks for a potion... how does he know his system have that? Also, why is he unable to view some missions unless he accepts them? Hell, he doesn't even have a clue what his rewards will be. Also personally I think this system could of used a Shop Sytem (Not a gacha system, all gacha system's are PURE and utter GARBAGE). Now about the missions. They are entirely unrelated to the goals of what the system wants. Amd just not good most of the time. What does giving coffee to a grandma have to do with being an Idol? Nothing. Why not instead give him a mission to practice singing for an hour? Practice makeup for 4 hours? Buy a stylish outfit for _ amount of money? Also, why are all the pop-up requests comfort this person or that person (at least where I stopped), the system really should of had a system like, "'Alright, class I am your dance instructor. Frankly, a lot of you 0-stars not going to make it, but I expect nothing but your utmost focus, if you think this is a game get out,' Human said pausing and looking around. 'Good, not that's out of the way, we'll begging with rythm...' Mc gradually phased out the instructors voice, instead opting look at his new mission [Get through the practice with 4 mistakes or less]" Overall, the system is annoying but not absolutely bad. Besides that the author forcefully makes the Mc have "durrrr, I can't use my brain" at moments which is nothing new to most books on this platform, still annoying. Also, what's with the characters calling Mc cute and shit and he's just like 😶. Was he a thug or not? This is one of the reasons I'll also stop reading this while I'm a head because it feels like it's going to be some gay sh*t. Overall, I read to chapter 45, it's an okay book, it's not my speed, but I think a majority of people will be able to enjoy it.

I almost forgot. When I said virgin I meant in the literal sense; character is a bit of a f*ckboy, not enough to distract from the reading though (in my personal opinion).