Webnovel Author: Retsag - Novel Collection

Retsag

5mth

Replied to Dunhyll0147

Sure, I have a twitter, Reddit and Discord acount if you want to speak in private or public.

How can this possibly help the reader understand what your novel is about, and what the interesting points in it are? The answer is obviously that it won't.

Retsag

5mth

Replied to Dunhyll0147

Whoa, who knew that going up to a stranger and shouting at them about their work was a valid marketing strategy ? ¯\_(ツ)_/¯ On a more serious note, thanks :] I hope I helped you improve your story even if just a little bit

How can this possibly help the reader understand what your novel is about, and what the interesting points in it are? The answer is obviously that it won't.

Retsag

5mth

Replied to Dunhyll0147

ps: your turn now

How can this possibly help the reader understand what your novel is about, and what the interesting points in it are? The answer is obviously that it won't.

Retsag

5mth

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... what did I just read ?I... I don't know what to think.It's just so long and all over the place without clearly stating what the main focus of the book is about.I feel in increasing order: intrigued, extremely confused and completly apathic to it all.In conclusion and no mater if its intentional or not: its bad

How can this possibly help the reader understand what your novel is about, and what the interesting points in it are? The answer is obviously that it won't.

Retsag

6mth

Replied to Iceknith

If you're refering to the "it" in "its pray", then it is correct.The "it" is replacing predator

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Retsag

6mth

Replied to Iceknith

yeah, it's abdurdly distracting to repeat absurdly so much.I'll stop this absurdity in about two absurdly long hours!

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Retsag

6mth

Replied to Iceknith

Iceknith: *in heavy british upperclass acsent*

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Retsag

6mth

Replied to NewbieJimjim

Hey, we should really fire the guy who though this was a good idea.

-Isn't that the robot I gave an arm to?" I asked aloud, causing said robot to stop whatever he was doing, turn around toward the elevator cage, exit the thing before turning to me and saying: "L'ascenseur prise de vue menant jusqu'au dernier étage est actuellement en réparation, le temps approximatif de réparation est de 3 heures et 42 minutes. La fondation vous prie de bien vouloir prendre le 3ème ascenseur jusqu'au 722 étages puis continuée à pied jusqu'au 1240 étages pour un temps de marche estimé de 8 heures et 15 minutes."

No More Fantasy

Fantasy · Retsag

Retsag

7mth

8mth

Replied to pitichicken

there is no escape

-JULIETTE!" Shouted the teenage girl as she jumped in Benito's back and low kicked, making the man fall over and accidentally fire a shot in the air before landing face first against the concrete floor.