Daragon_Fiyar - Profile

Good story quality, Interesting story development to continue following, character design is quite classic, but good! world background like the previous novel, but worth following, overall average can be described as a very good and interesting novel!

The story's intonation is much better, the plot is not too rushed, the dialogue is quite good, but the punctuation is very, very poor. This is how it should be if you use a question mark. Do not add a period. That is very wrong. "!." is very foolish and incorrect. Just use "!" or "." separately. For example, "Hey Luffy! How are you!" Okay, just use the exclamation mark. Do not add it with a period. Also, do not add the combination of "!?" too frequently and continuously. It is very inefficient and uncomfortable. Just use "!" or "?" alone.

There are several writing errors, inappropriate punctuation, somewhat strange descriptions, a rushed storyline, lack of good story intonation, it can be said to be very lacking. Can it be read? Yes, that's all. Thank you.

There are several writing errors, inappropriate punctuation, somewhat strange descriptions, a rushed storyline, lack of good story intonation, it can be said to be very lacking. Can it be read? Yes, that's all. Thank you.

What! I can't believe this, I thought I was wrong before, but this turned out to be true, you took the reference from Otome Game Sekai wa Mob ni Kibishii Sekai Desu, from his world, mc background, from mc being sold, then about him finding the robot like a ball , even mc's fight with the prince, even though Alice is not engaged to the prince, but there are some things in common, even now that Alice, transferred to the territory of mc is also the same, even though in this novel the mc does not know that he is in the otome game, and the one who knows it is erselice... I don't know what her name is, anyway she knows that the world is a game, really the storyline of this novel is too fast, the conflict is too fast, if you want to make a novel, and take references from other people's novels, at least try not to be too similar, it's too similar, in the beginning, if you ask me, that's all, hopefully the novel will be better.