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author is using words he and and wayyy to much . Instead of describing things he is just telling them. the philosophy quets feel out of place and are often redundant , things he is getting are to convenient like especially considering that him getting reborn with 2 op bloodlines is close to impossible having so much luck is reminding me that this is a story and thaf breaks immersion the biggest exmp is this demon tower like no reason for him to get it second biggest is eny op weapon that no one with common sense would place it at nexus just to distract some brat the fact that sometihng so strong have idiot like general is also weird even with fact that it is useless to everyone but mc. Combat is pretty bad and dull and amateurishly. Character development is not done the best it is rushed and one dimensional, there is to much fake deep questions that are discusse by narration instead of showen in story. Power system is intresting but undeveloped. Author promised protagonist in near death scenario where he will need his wits to survive aginst cunning experienced villians. we got mc of avarage intelligencd somewhat reckless behavior who survive mostly by op powers and mostly by luck . Villians are meh aside from general they were mostly unlucky but they never fealt like threat or competent rly . There is lack of side characters but that is mostly my preference not foult of story in itself. Eng is not the best a pity cause by comments of author it seems he is pretty decent speaker only adive that i can give u is that u read ur work after u rested. The idea seems great but execution is not i am sure u will improve im future hopefully this can help u do it daster
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