changthemhoes - Profile

it is decent but still has many flaws first grammar: the grammar is doable to be honest, if you can tolerate poor grammar, I think you'll be fine. story/plot: the plot was weird alright, are you still trying to make dance of the dragons by killing aemma and baelon? and also your sudden technological uplift is kind of unrealistic, and really around 500,000 to 600,000 in just under 2 years that's just a big fat bull. character: the mc is just mediocre goody two shoes who tries to please anyone, I mean just smaug or toruk can make scorched army to death, you also said that your essarian flying lizard scales are hard as steel, so whats stopping mc's ass to fight, and also if the mc main concern using dragons against slaves he wished to free, he can just use sheer strategy or assasination to defeat the slavers and wise masters, man, plot holes are every where. anyways it's still a decent read if you want a wish fullfullment or a valyrian idiotic power wank