Webnovel Author: Elementary72

Elementary72

1yr

Posted

I've given this book my all and hope that it comes across with both a strong sense of adventure and keeps you wanting more as the story progresses

Elementary72

1yr

Posted

lovely classic style writing. I enjoy the basic flow of the words. I even listened to the book like an audio book since the grammar is nearly perfect. The story has a good essence however I got a long way to go before I can conclude on the story content

Elementary72

1yr

Commented

flight is awesome I love the build up

He felt thankful. All the sufferings he had experienced were worth the price for this paradise. He had two loving parents, a dream-like world, and reality-bending power that he didn't dare to imagine.

Demon King's Son

Fantasy · Harlyboy

Elementary72

1yr

Commented

past few paragraphs help build a piece of the world

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Demon King's Son

Fantasy · Harlyboy

Elementary72

1yr

Commented

perfect contextualization for charcter views

Time worked differently for Eve and Hujarar. For them, four months was a blink of an eye, but for Aldred, it was quite a long time.

Demon King's Son

Fantasy · Harlyboy

Elementary72

1yr

Commented

paragraph structure was good however the action would be rocking the baby back and forth as shaking babies is dangerous

Eve kissed his forehead and stood up from her seat. She softly shook him up and down while singing him a lullaby song. Her voice was ethereal beyond measure like it came from heaven itself.

Demon King's Son

Fantasy · Harlyboy

Elementary72

1yr

Commented

like this paragraph finally context in full to a charcter

History: Demon King Hujarar was crowned as the King of Hell at the age of 7 when he killed the king of that era. He was feared by many and proved to be a lethal threat to the universe. A thousand ancient beings felt threatened by his existence, but only a hundred of them stood up and fought against him. After countless millenniums of battle, Hujarar made a deal for peace, conquering more than a million worlds and presenting them to the ancient beings as the price for his peace.

Demon King's Son

Fantasy · Harlyboy

Elementary72

1yr

Commented

didn't see this coming

Power: Immortality, Control Reality, Domain Administrator, Universal Gate...

Demon King's Son

Fantasy · Harlyboy

Elementary72

1yr

Commented

this sounds like it should have followed before the child had his blessings anounced

Aldred felt a divine aura wash all over him, and even though he was still a baby he believed he could lift a large boulder with his hand alone. He wasn't sure if this was overconfident of him or not, but he definitely felt strength and power inside of him.