Fruitlooper

8mth

Commented

Can't wait for the next chapter. hope nothing bad happens

ch 0 9 Chapter 9

Fruitlooper

8mth

Commented

ok so its a 9 letterd word, that has to be censored. we can do this guys.

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My Mistress is a Reincarnated Person!! (GL)

LGBT+ · ThinkOSomeCoolName

Fruitlooper

1yr

Commented

Im so glad jens back i nearly thought she died off screen or she was just snapped out of this world

"I just have a lot on my mind," I said as I rolled over and looked at her. "Jen, do you think I am trying to do too much?"

Reborn: I'm A Dragon Girl With An OP System

Fantasy · invayne

Fruitlooper

1yr

Replied to xxKimberlyxx

1 point for dad

"There is no hurry. They can be engaged first. It is good that Nan Nan is very studious. Their children will be very bright as well and would definitely be college graduates!" Zhou Bing's wife had sparkles in her eyes. She had grown to like her young daughter-in-law more and more.

Rebirth to a Military Marriage: Good Morning Chief

Urban · Brocade Star of Love

Fruitlooper

1yr

Commented

24-31 wow I'm not sure what's more surprising the amount of time Nan Nan is going to be in collage for or how old Zhou jun would be.

When Nan Nan graduated from college, she would be twenty-four years old. However, Zhou Bing's son, Zhou Jun, would be thirty-one years old by then.

Rebirth to a Military Marriage: Good Morning Chief

Urban · Brocade Star of Love

Fruitlooper

1yr

Replied to Michele_Mays_7238

i think it got dropped

Eternal Saga: The Beginning

Fantasy · invayne

Fruitlooper

1yr

Replied to OrdinaryHuman

i got one question that I desperately need answered i haven't fished reading and this still bothers me. when does the tournament start?????? it was delayed by like 20 chapters so far can someone please tell me when it starts.

The World Serpent

Fantasy · OrdinaryHuman

Fruitlooper

1yr

Replied to invayne

will "eternal saga: beginnings book" ever have a ending?

Reborn: I'm A Dragon Girl With An OP System

Fantasy · invayne

Fruitlooper

1yr

Replied to Fruitlooper

I forgot to write keep up the good work

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Fruitlooper

1yr

Replied to Fruitlooper

as you can tell i don't re-read my own comments lol

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Fruitlooper

1yr

Commented

I like how this chapter is mostly world building and explaining the main characters, I think focusing on one of the twins was a good choice but i think you could switch from one to the other if you want for more variety when writing. I personal thought the chapter felt kind of short but it did what it needed to do like slight world building and explaining basic things of this new world like the moon. Makeing the character oblivious to the moon was a good idea for more information dumping.

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Fruitlooper

1yr

Replied to Fruitlooper

I'm really bad at writing feedback

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Fruitlooper

1yr

Commented

I'm not sure if I like this Prologue over the old one. I like that this one has more of a story and the way the prologue ending leads onto the rest of the story of the book (I like how the hero and the "villain" have a personal story) but the old one gave more information and gave us a little more understanding of the world that the characters exist in. (by talking about gods and everything else)

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Fruitlooper

1yr

Commented

1000 stealth still gets spotted

●[Senses: 600]-[Stealth: 1000]

The World Serpent

Fantasy · OrdinaryHuman

Fruitlooper

1yr

Replied to Eirthriel

sounds interesting

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Fruitlooper

1yr

Replied to immortal_water

i thought they were making an entirely separate novel that was just going to be a side story from this one.

ch 83 Volume 6.5 : Chapter – 1 : A Bird Is Born In A Cage

WHEN I GOT REINCARNATED AS A SPIDER WITH MY GODDESS

Fantasy · Noel_Elitia

Fruitlooper

1yr

Commented

I thought bird cage would be its on separate novel.

ch 86 Volume - 6.5 : Chapter - 4 : THE DEATH GAME

WHEN I GOT REINCARNATED AS A SPIDER WITH MY GODDESS

Fantasy · Noel_Elitia

Fruitlooper

1yr

Replied to Fruitlooper

i love this story and the ending of this volume fits so well

ch 10 Chapter-9~The Truth~

Gonin Hitoyaku Demo Kimi ga Suki

Teen · Mr_BLack

Fruitlooper

1yr

Commented

At first I was like oh no this isn't fair then I thought about what he was doing and realized how big of a manipulative idiot he was. I think he went wrong when he started lying to them about his eyes and everything, like if he had of said "I already knew/guessed that you were quintuplets" it would have probably been better but he decided "Nah" Ima lie and pretend that i don't know anything and pretend to do all these good thing and lie a lot just so they like me more" How crazy is this man.

ch 10 Chapter-9~The Truth~

Gonin Hitoyaku Demo Kimi ga Suki

Teen · Mr_BLack

Fruitlooper

1yr

Posted

so this is a rewrite of the last one with a bit more added, correct. i think this book is really good and the writing has certainly improved compared to the old version. I also like the new mystery added in compared to the old one where you were given all the info on a silver platter.

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