Reviews of Origin System by LazerSnipe - Webnovel

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Like it. Just need more updates. Or if you plan to stop working on it just let us know Please..........................................................

It seems alright, however the synnopsis was confusing, grammar mistakes, the characters don't feel at all real or unique and I don't really get the spark in reading where I expect something from it. A good attempt however and I wish you well in writing.

You get no information about the world, characters, fights, levels, anything. The author just throws a massive dump of crap at you and hope it sticks. No sense of time, or development. You are thrown into a world where everything moves a mile a minute. If you want subpar writing and story and just need to waste some time than go ahead, if you got some self respect don't read. Sorry that this sounds mean but this story pissed me off.

Well, This one novel is the the one that i truly don't know what to say! Right, I Don't know what to say and only laugh at it. Reading it to the current last chapter(20) i only feel laughing to Death. First of all i must say that as a truly newbie noob Writer, Author Tried his best to this point and i happy for him BUT the problem is that Almost many of these Friends of ours have lacking in the foundational matters like comprehension Meaning of Cultivation , Skill , Character Design and Storyline. In my view being an new Author Doesn't means that They can have problems in even storyline and story. Lacking in grammar aspect Lacking in Descriptions of Events and scenes Lacking in Creativity Lacking in Storyline and Events Lacking in Foundations. Author doing this in as Hobby. Or at least i didn't he wants anythings So there are not many problems for he continue this as he's gaining Experience. Author please first of all create your events better, we hardly can grasp what happen in every events. then if your writing this so please put more time on it and at least do cultivation and missions properly.

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Hay 1st and 2nd chapter is same please do something about it Also THE ORIGIN SYSTEM ON OTHER SYSTEM REQUIRED is too good . Keep up the good work also increase the post rate if possible.

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Muito bom já estou viciado kkkkk Recomendo à todos a acompanhar. ........................................................................................

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😯 Not bad Random: and he is not a big fan and I have a lot of time to make a funny way to the office now to see what you look like a good plan to do it was the best first thing tomorrow morning friend of mine who were the only one I can think about him being a part yet I will be at work tomorrow at his place between us I will get it to get it to you tomorrow or something if he wants it he will not sure if he will be the same time I was in bed at a loss was just a thought but wanted him and he is going for the day so I will not all of it is very important for a while but I have a few questions for you can come to me I can be there in the morning and I will try and get a new journey to get a hold of the guy he is going for the day so it was nice talking to get it was the first time to go to bed now so he can be there by him and I will get back with you in a couple of days ago and it was so great Lizard and he is a very beautiful and ***y I love it was good I just wanted him and I will get back with you in a couple of days ago but I didn't get the attachment for him and he found his wives and was told him to call his cell to get it to me I have to get up at all and the kids and the rest is history of them and they are everywhere and he said that he

continue this novel, it has a lot of potential, great character design and fast character development. I may get addicted to this 😊 please update .. i need more of this

I read the beginning of this story on wattpad. For now the plot and characters are interesting . Good story so far and i advice u to go reading it .

I didn't read it you should say the type of system is an origin system. :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-)