Reviews of Sorcha Knight in the City by existing - Webnovel

AUTHOR WHEN WILL U UPDATE? I RE-READ THIS STORY LIKE 10 TIMES ALREADY OVER THE PAST YEAR, THIS TIME I FINALLY DECIDED TO MAKE AN ACCOUNT AND ASK YOU WHEN YOU WILL UPDATE THE NEXT CHAPTER. PLEASE TELL ME THIS NOVEL ISNT DROPPED? I LIKE THIS NOVEL ALOT AND WANT TO READ MOREE!!!

This is a great story I'm really hook up I can't wait the story will progress the girl is so cool I hope they can be together with the male lead.haha.thanks I hope it will update I will wait patiently.thanks again 😉😉😊😊😍😉😍😉😉😉😍😉😍😉😍😉😉😍😉😍😉😍

It was a good story that I'm still waiting for the updates... Please author, update for more chapters.... The story of the girl who wants to be trained early and saved many people... Even though she's not yet a soldier...

It was an interesting story but please author update for more chapters... I like this story but the problem is that I'm waiting for your updates...

Hello, your novel has been assessed and review by Virtual Bookshelf. A review excerpt is as follows: Technical: This story’s technical writing is a little less polished than your novel, White Queen Ascending. Dialogue heavy with little description of how people talk, their gestures, actions, thoughts, and emotions. As a romance fiction, interpersonal relationships and inner feeling and thinking is most important. Chapter 7 has world explanation. Ok. Sorcha, Zamir - Okay, so the basic premise is whether they can hook up again and fulfill their promise. Sorcha’s character is expressed the best of the cast. But just like the rest, her motivations and idiosyncrasies in terms of daily thoughts and emotions are absent. Edmund, Rica, Anthony, Aria, Michael, Luke, Ryan, Marion - They are all introduced by chapter 9. This is way too many characters introduced in the beginning, and they have little to differentiate themselves from one another or any clear importance or significance to the plot. Edmund and Sorcha pairing, Luke, Rica - Lacking build up in chapter 23. Ryan and Sorcha - Big brother… Again, lacks build or much reason for attraction. It’s also somewhat disturbing as he’s the teacher.. But it’s reined in, so it’s not of much concern. Aunt Claire, David - They appear basically once and are not mentioned much again until David in chapter 47. Plot: The only real action that occurred throughout these 49 chapters is the Sorcha kidnapping, running, and rescue. Before that, it’s basically her school life with her friends, and they don’t do anything that’s real interesting. The synopsis is interesting, even if the reincarnation and finding an old lover has been done before, but the story only sticks to this in the beginning, and none of the events that follow add any bit to this supposed overarching storyline. If Sorcha remembers her past life, then she isn’t doing anything that’s reminiscent of that life or trying to seek out the people she knew. If she doesn’t remember, then the events themselves should subtly build up to the same premise. .........(cont.) The full review is linked to your title on: https://virtualbookshelf.home.blog/2019/02/02/webnovel-assessments-10/ After three chapters, you may request to be assessed again. Thank you, and the best of luck on your writing endeavors! :)

A story of female lead transmigrated to modern world in which focus in military field. I found it interesting because the theme is what Im looking for. With caring father, yummy romance and funny friendship but I just want the action part to be explosive since our female lead has a military backgroud which I found it missing in this novel. Character design has its uniqueness but please have more interaction to our main characters romance. And hoping more updates.

Hello! I just started reading the book this morning ... And I'm already at the last chapter ... It's a really good book and has original ideas. Unfortunately, there are mistakes now and then, but we are all not perfect. Hopefully that will change ?! I hope that the chapters will come out more regularly ... I'll recommend the book to my friends ... For that I have to be praised and maybe we all get an extra chapter ?! Hehe I know that sometimes I am (mostly) shameless ... But I can not change that ... 😉🙃😇😇

Love the cover! About the writing... usual gripes/pet peeves/just basic stuff: -If you start a sentence, end it with a punctuation mark. -Capitalize proper nouns like names of people, especially your main character. Capitalize the beginning of every sentence as well. -There should be commas before or after a name (sometimes both) if they're being referred to. E.g., "Good morning Principal Bryant." --> there should be a comma after *morning*; "Go greet her sorcha this..." --> there should be a comma after *her*, and BONUS, sorcha should be capitalized and there should be a period after it. I couldn't fully immerse myself in the story because the errors kept distracting me. That said, I love the idea of reincarnated lovers. I'm a sucker for that. And it's nice to see that the author keeps writing. The regular practice would greatly benefit her if it's done mindfully and with improvement as the ultimate goal. Good luck :)

This book effectively mixes young ***** school life with the theme of reincarnation. Although the reincarnation theme has been done a couple of times, I believe this story has a charm of its own. The characters are likable, especially the main lead, Sorcha. Regarding the world background, it is evident that the writer has taken time to conceptualize the world, and that's really something. I also appreciate the pacing of the story. It's not too fast like the others I've read here. My only suggestion would be to look into the writing. There are some grammar errors that could be rechecked. Also, I think it would be better to stick to one or two POVS only. The POVS tend to shift within a chapter. That would be okay if this was a comics/graphic novel, but that's not really a good thing when it's just plain narrative. And as much as I appreciate the vivid descriptions, they can be a bit 'telling' than 'showing' at times. It's always better to add action to a description rather than merely saying it like: My hair is like this...My eyes are... Also, I think the world building will be more efficient if the author described the world as the characters experienced it rather than merely enumerating things the world has or hasn't. These are just my take though. Feel free to use or disregard my comments as you see fit. Overall, I did enjoy the read. Just a little polishing and I think this will be a really promising novel.

Here's a shameless 5 star review from thy author. (I deleted the first one) This story may not suit a lot of people's taste, but personally, this one is really fun for me. It's pretty mild and comes with only a few conflicts, not making it an addition to the reader's stressors. Of course I am very biased since it is made by me ✌️✌️😂 If anyone could read this, I hope you could give this novel a try. That would be really appreciated. Here's a warning though: I'm not a professional writer, and I only write whenever I'm free. Sometimes you would have to wait for a long time for a new release. All I could do is to promise that I will make it up to you whenever it's possible. Powerstones could really help me, though, just by taking your time to read this makes me really happy.

I totally fell in love with this story. I'm a type of person who loves reading an action story or movie. But it hard to find a story that I like such as the characters, the plot etc. And this story is one of the rare stories that I like. So, yeah I totally treasure this kind of story lol.

*Remember, this review is based on the first 5 chapters* Constructive Criticism: None for the first 5 chapters, but I looked over the updates, and they seem a bit sporadic, I'd suggest coming up with a schedule you believe you can stick to, and then just putting out that many chapters regardless of if you happen to have extras. (I am doing exactly that, with one a week) Positive Feedback: Strong start, and I like how smooth the transition was to the new world, I just hope to see more about her past in the near future.;,;. Personal Feedback: I likely started this novel for a review swap, however, I will keep it in my library to continue later.;,;. keep up the good work.;,;.

Everything about this story is 5/5 from strictly a judging perspective. Writing is good, updates are stable, there's a story unfolding, characters are unique, and the world background is explained well. However, I just can't seem to get into it. Granted, I've only read five chapters so far. I guess my problem with it is the lack of conflict to create some interest? The chapters are very short though, so perhaps that comes soon after chapter 5. Final thoughts: I like White Queen Ascending much more =p

**Brutal Mode** Originality - None. 0/5. Good work on the copy paste reincarnation story tropes. Oh you forgot that the MC's name was Sorcha, she died, reborn and her new parents happened to name her Sorcha. The ODDS!?! The neighbouring countries of Linbourne are Oakbourne, Silverbourne, and Vertbourne, and Linbourne. Linbourne not only neighbours itself all countries end with *bourne! Story - 4/5 Despite having felt I have read this story before I actually enjoyed it. That is until every male, including ones in their twenties, were infatuated with her. And wondering why a four-year-old girl gave them a cold shoulder. ** I know who Marion is unless you have a twist planned. This could have waited until she was older. Marion and Ryan could have found her intelligent and cute. Characters - 3/5 The MC has a kick ass personality. Everyone else is a cliche. With the exception of Edmund. Most of the kids and adults speak with the Authors voice. Except for Edmund, he is special. Edmund should become the new main sidekick. Go, Edmund. Poor little shy bastard with no redeeming qualities except he loves MC. Flow - 5/5 The flow is excellent. Nothing to troll here. Move along troll, move along. I found it easy to read. But you need to stop apologising for long chapters. You are the storyteller. It is what it is. The story comes first. Fuck the reader. If the story demands a 10k chapter. Then they can suck a cold one. Give them a 10k chapter. Give them cliffhangers too. Take no prisoners. . . Nice Suggestions: I enjoyed reading the story. I would suggest a few things to improve, but above all keep writing. . 1) describe what it looks like. The classroom, the home, the cafe. Wherever the characters are spending time. Take time to describe it once so the reader can picture it in their mind. . 2) Give the characters a distinct voice. You are halfway there, keep going. . 3) describe the character's appearance once. Have Luke think about Sorcha. Or what Rica sees when looking at Ryan. or just describe them. Give them a quirk or difference. . 4) dont make it too easy for the MC. Good things come to those who wait. Not every man adores her. Some might just want to be friends. Some might take a long time. Some might give her pushback initially and her strong will then forces her way through.

A rather decent story so far, I look forward to what happens next! I really like seeing a good female MC! Especially when they are considered relatively strong!