So ... hopefully this will come out as at least somewhat constructive criticism. I’ll first suggest you would be better with no cover picture than the extremely crude one you have. Second, I doubt you even realize you are doing it, but seemingly half of your paragraphs and sentences start with the word “So”. It’s distracting, annoying, and while I might be mistaken, I think it’s just plain wrong linguistically. Third, my first 2 points, combine with the somewhat awkward phrasing and pacing, strongly point to needing a good editor to work closely with, and possibly some writing classes to help polish your writing if you are serious.
And then folks, I'm Goodlion the author, thank you very much for reading and keep on going, I'll try to post a chapter a day and soon the world of cultivation will appear.
Your novel be happy with sports made me want to check out other books you wrote. I think you have potential to be a good author. I do notice some grammar errors, but nothing that a person who reads a lot of webnovels wouldn't be able to not understand. I hope I can get addicted to this as I am of your novel happy. Right now I'm using this just to kill time until the next chapter comes out. Keep writing I'm selfish and need my fix of web novels
i like the fact that the mc has transmigrated from the earths past (probably ancient china) not the earth of today. Also i like the fact that he doesnt have a system/golden finger. and i also have a feeling the reason behind him being malnourished is coz the energy on earth is limited.
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