Hello, all I am the author of this novel. I just want to say this is probably one of the most favorite novels I have ever had the pleasure to write and read and I have read a lot of novels. Of course, this is just my personal opinion. I just really enjoy writing about Ah Chun and her trip through her path of cultivation. The trials and tribulations that she will have to go through are well worth everyone's reading time. So for all my fans out there thanks a lot for reading this novel and experiencing the story of Ah Chun with me!
This has one of my favorite characters on webnovel. Ah Chun is such an interesting combination of adorable cuteness and murderous destruction. The plot twists are great, the world building is excellent, the character interactions walk a fine line between honoring the caricatures most cultivation novels have and realistic people.
To cover the two categories I couldn't in good faith give five stars... The writing quality beats out a large majority of novels here, though a bit more editing would catch the three or four minor errors in each chapter. Not enough to detract from the reading, but often enough to lose a star. The other issue is the release rate, technically I should probably give a full five stars because Mr. Invayne does post the promised amount weekly, but there isn't a set schedule to it.
Also, Mr. Invayne is working on four novels actively and divides his time based on popularity, and my poor, sweet, adorable, loli just isn't as popular as his others. So read this novel and vote for it so I get more chapters a week!
I really love this book but all of a sudden, you stopped updating. I really like it and I wish it will be updated. The characters are superb. But there's a confusion at the end. In the new dimension, she never met Mei liling so how did Mei liling recognize her. Does it mean that she was transported to that dimension. Then does that mean that immortal Xiao did not deceive her. Overall , I love the book. See ya!
I droves this novel until the author decided to male her straight. They were obviously going for a yuri novel but didn’t. All in all I was really disappointed. The turn around on who she likes was really fast too. That just wouldn’t happen in real life.
This is such a great story! It is fun to read and very interesting. However, there is a major flaw (in my opinion). When the mc gets to the first sect, she meets another little girl who falls in love with her. The mc reciprocates the feelings a little, and her mother gives her okay if things develop between them. Very soon after this the ml is introduced and decides he is going to marry the mc. I did not read past chapter 70, so I am not sure how the story ends, but, by that point in the story, the mc had decided to pursue the ml. Introducing a yuri love interest that was super cute and enjoyable only to throw it in the trash immediately afterward and replace it with a traditional overbearing and arrogant ml love interest was too much for me. It is such a shame because, other than that, this story was right up my alley...
As I said before, I did not finish this story, so things may have corrected themselves. I did skim some of the later chapters, and it seems like she either loses both of them or sticks with the ml. Either scenario is enough to make me leave this story.
This story started out pretty good, however, the mc is basically switched for a different one at the 99 lives samsara thing, and even worse once ah chun goes back to help the immortal that gives her the dreamscape ability, she basically restarts from nothing with a different body. And with none of the bloodlines or understandings she had in her 'past life'. Honestly, you might as well just start reading from that point on as it will save you the frustration of literally everything Ah Chun has worked for disappearing. And I can understand her cultivation disappearing, but for her bloodline, her Dao's (which are supposed to just be understanding, and she didn't lose any memory's) and both her cultivation and her cultivation technique, and her spiritual roots. It might as well be an entirely different novel from that point on, with mc's that have the same name and personality. Though the story up to that point is great.
Great story. I really like that the fl doesn’t need to rely on the ml because she is strong enough to take care of herself. I also like how this story has a different twist unlike some of the other cultivation novels I’ve read.
Am more on a Romance Comedy fan but this novel gives me a 360 degrees turn-around. Ah Chun Breaks through my realm and hooked me since Chapter 1. A roller-coaster ride of affections, a doting mother-daughter, a loyal sister-sister and a strong friendship bonds makes you laugh, cry, and swoon.
Ah Chun is just simply the best. You will love reading through each chapter and be part of her life’s growth into immortality.
What is the best of this novel, Ah Chun and Ning Shen! Simply beautifully in love with each other. No qualms, no miscommunications, no lies.
Am bound to this novel. Kudos to the Author!
I like how u manage Ah Chun to be strong 'lil by 'lil and prove if u really cant judge a book by cover 😆
Althought i was thinking if this will be Yuri story 😂 but fortunattely it wont, thanks to Ning Shen 🤣
I definitely enjoyed this book. It is very well written the author definitely knows how to write a book as well as the fact that it's very enjoyable. I have to look at this book and think that a little girl main character is definitely an interesting perspective for a main character of web novel so overall I give this the only 5-star rating on giving out so far I definitely encourage you to read it
First off, I hesitate to write reviews for two reasons. The first is they usually get deleted, and the second is I know how much a review can impact an aspiring author. However. I feel the need to review this book. I have given myself some time to cool off so my review is more objective. To start, what you did right.
The way the main character acts as a young child and amazing powers was well done. She throws tantrums for no reason, is easily influenced by her mother, and gets pouty. Her anger issues result in what a normal toddler would do, such as hitting someone, it just is more deadly.
The swiftness with which the story progresses is nice. Usually wuxias take forever and a day to get anywhere. This book has a good pace.
Finally, there is little to no grammar errors in this book. It is either well edited or you have great English.
Now what I think you did wrong
The "sudden change" in ah chun's behavior, while you had a good reason for it, was poorly executed. Yes, she needed to grow up and change her attitude, and 99 lives would do it. However, this was a prime example of telling and not showing. You told us what she experienced, but it was so fast and sudden that it feels more like you rewrote the character to fit the tone and need of the story, rather than having her grow into it. Character development is an important part of a novel, and I don't think it was done well here.
Second, the way she falls for the male lead. Frankly,, it was bad. Yes, 99 lives is a good excuse, but again, telling not showing. It feels more like a forced romance than something that was built up over the time you said it was (99 lives). Furthermore, having it happen so fast removes the point of the "is t love" chapters, and the point of that little girl at all. Removing her from the story would change literally nothing. For someone you placed such emphasis on early, she ended up being nothing but a filler character. I don't have a problem with her loving Shen, the issue is how "fast" it happened. OverallC I blame this on what I believe to be your want to write a romance novel overriding your patience in setting it up. Also, the dialogue between female lead and male lead is...not well executed, multiple long paragraphs about them gushing how they will be forever together and never betray each other is not even remotely close to how lovers talk in real life (at least in my experience). I found myself skipping paragraphs because it was awkward to read and really had no impact on the story.
Overall, a great story was messed up by a portly executed good idea (samsara). My advice is try to take time to develop the characters and not simply change them to fit your will. While your characters are your creation, inside the story they are their own people, and need to grow like a real person would.
Tbh, I think that An Chun should calm down a little bit. She's way to violent compared to other MCs, but I guess that's what mak her special. However, I think that she should have a little bit more of self-control. Otherwise, great story.
it is a very good story just like the others that invayne writes.
it will keep you on the edge of your seat trying to figure out what Ah Chun is gonna do next. if you are into this type of story this is a very good one to read.
Firstly i would like to thank author-sama for all the novels he has written irregardless of genre. Each and everyone was able to pull me in like our FL pulling all the qi into her like a vortex. The plot twists are unexpected but every incarnation of FL is full of challenges. There are some minor typos and sometimes infos and name n ranks gets confusing but everything else os alright. Our author gets sick quite often tt might affec chapers.
Ah Chun finally grows her body according to what her actual age is and she has gained new powers. Not only that, there seems to be a mysterious and powerful bloodline in her that she didn't know about. Can't wait to read more.
Nice story to read with a fun strong willed FL. First story I read where the main char actually is reborn multiple times. Sometimes she is a bit unreasonable towards strangers though, ruining their reputation even though they did not do anything to her. But i guess that's just her character.
It is starting to get interesting with Ah Chun thinking and acting like an ***** despite the fact that she is physically a child. She also has developed feelings toward Ning Jin. I'm liking this novel so far, can't wait to read more.