Great story, solid writing, steady updates, and awesome development. If you are looking for an enjoyable story, you've got one here. The advice I would give is to add more description regarding what the characters look like. Perhaps during that first interaction describe how they dress or how they are dressed (it makes for good immersion). Describe the setting and background a bit more.
Describe what people see to make the world feel more real. Describe the sky, the grass or desert sand, something or anything to put someone in that scene. You could describe what someone smells. Maybe it smells good like cinnamon because an older lady has freshly baked cinnabons outside. Maybe it smells like rotten sewage outside.
You can describe how someone smells. Perhaps a woman has a vanilla cranberry perfume sprayed across her body. Maybe a man's breath smells like old garlic. Hope you get the gist, I don't think description is used as much as I'd like in 90 percent of webnovels but it's only my two cents. If done right it can enhance a story, though some people overdo it (maybe like me).
It is a stylistic preference how much is needed but I think every writer should try different forms of narrative description at times. The lore background and setting is nice. The author does a good job laying that out from early on. Hope you appreciated my feedback, you are also welcome to check out my works. Cheers.
the reason i have given . .. .this rating is because of ur . .. paragraph writting way. .. the long and large paragraphs. .may not help attract . .. readers because me myself would leave a book if it had lot of describing paragraphs. .. .. whereas talking about the story, characters, plot . .. its excellent π.. .keep it . up
I just love everything About this novel
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this is really different from other novels and I really loved it all. I like both ML and FML has overcome their difficulties with love and trust. this is a wonderful story. thank you for this wonderful story. π₯°π₯°π₯°ππππ§‘ππ€πβ£οΈπ
this book , only one word, heaven , i.t is a book that matched my interlectual standard , I read it on lightreader but it is still it's so amazing , it had me on the edge of my seat I love it , I wanna read all your work please .
I'm not really good in giving review, but I think this book deserves a review. In terms of writing quality, there are room for improvement. What special about this book is the problem in society which is exist but rarely talk about. Of course in this book, everything is to the extreme but things like Stockholm Syndrom, sexual abuse of males, Pedophilia does exist and rarely talk about or highlighted. Not many author also actually write things around this issue. Male lead usually potrayed as someone who is GOD like, there are some issue around the ML, but in this novel the issues about ML is totally something new. If you want to experience something out of the normal romance novel, try read this novel.
Daaamn, I wanted to finish the whole story to write a review. Well, I don't even know what to say anymore, this story makes you realize, what a dirty society we have today, some may be worse, or may be less than that, but human nature is "free will", we make mistakes, we are wronged, we intimidate, bully, etc., humans are sometimes scary. But there will always be someone who is willing to help you, love you, support you and more.
This story sometimes gave me chills with some characters, but that is the cruel reality for some people, who do not have a healthy mind.
This is a cery goid book the story kept me wanting mOre i could not put this one down The xhara ters are great with so muxh mystery snd exciting outcomes
I got it this novel from nowhere and you know what? It gets interesting chapter by chapter......It also contains a lot of mystery too and I loved it.....I recommend you guys to read it....
Needs more build up in world, background and characters. Sorry but in what place would a daughter of a Minister of Education be treated like this? Any other time unless they are unloved this wouldn't happen. She is adored by her Minister father. No way would a principal be able to treat a superintendent this way.
Absolutely loving the book. The story development is good. It is neither too slow nor too fast. The updates are regular. The writing is good.
Ultimately the book is good and you won't regret reading it.
hello author after goin thru some of uts chapters I came to realize its actually interesting story with a nice plot n specially writing is very good.....
actually book is good but still sometimes its difficult for me to understand properly. so that's why I'm getting some problems.
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