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The story is great but just don't like the Main Character. I'm not even complaining him not being Overpowered I like under dog characters is just that your MC personality is ruining a great story.
I'm not gonna read a perfectly written story if the character suCk asS and have zero attachment to your MC is just gonna be annoying to read a chapter with that much screen time.
While I like the kind of mc that is cunning and morally ambiguous, I kinda like this mc even tho it bothers me a lot the fact that he choose as practice target people that might kill him and fight them with their own weapons, I mean it is the mc style but honestly it would be good if he has a contingency plan in case he is about to die and start taking things a little more seriously but apart from that I’m really liking the novel.
Some suggestions for Devil fruits could be a zoan that make the user a horned dung beetle, it is an insect that call pull more than thousand times its own weight so the user would have the strongest potencial on pure physical strength. Another could be a fruit that allows the user to control blood, it would be a normal Paramecia and the powers could allow the user to regenerate wounds and enter a mode similar to luffy’s gear second but without the restrictions and when the fruit awakens he could control other people’s blood.
By the way since you are also expanding the world you could add different weapons made from seastone like bullets staff and nets to capture Devil fruit users, I mean it would make much more sense for marines to use those kind of weapons to fight against Devil fruit users since most of their members don’t user armament haki
MC is an idiot who thinks he’s strong but is extremely weak lol he practically dies to a guy with a 2million bounty soooo I dropped it lol it was so boring reading 14chapters of him going after people with under a million bounty then his 15th chapter gets embarrassed lol not a fan of beta MCs
All in all a good start. The main character seems a little rash and weird at times, but it makes sense given his past. The character and setting descriptions are on point and the world definitely feels like something that would fit right in with One Piece.
Though I’m worried the story will take a turn should he find a random powerful devil fruit instead of growing stronger by continuing his training. At the moment that seems unlikely. I do hope to see more strange and wacky fights in the future though.
Since that’s the charm in allot of the combat in One Piece. Devil fruits aren’t the only way to do this. Different weapons, unique fighting styles and special techniques are all apart of what I enjoy about the fights in One Piece.
You don’t need to copy and paste Oda’s writing style or anything, what you’ve been doing is enjoyable. But a blend of your own style and the original style is what makes a really good fanfic. Just my two cents on the matter. GL