Good start.
While the story is fairly interesting,the grammar leaves much to be desired. Thankfully, it's an easy fix by running your stuff through Grammarly. Dialogue felt natural, as well as the prose. Quite frankly, it's really just a grammar problem.
Keep on writing. Fresh ideas shoulde't languish in one's mind π
The plot is really interesting and it's something completely new for me. The more you will read the more it will pull you in the plot.
The pace of the story is perfect and I have a feeling that each character has a story of their own.
The grammar is a little rough but it doesn't impact the story very badly. I'll suggest you to run your chapters through Grammarly, it will be a great help.
I'm actually looking forward to the next update because I wanna know what the Ice Stupid will do since he got a rival....haha! :)
Ahh....I dont wanna be sad hahaha kidding love this gotta continue reading this and you guys should too ππππππππππππππππππ€π€π€π€π€ππππππ
Pretty nice to see another story with a first POV. I've always liked to read first POV stories as I can know how the characters are feeling. Great choice.
Great potential I see here in the story. Keep going, author!
Okay, not your typical story. Its not average at best but to be honest its quite eye catching. Although writing could still get an improvement and grammar too, it wasnβt bad that it would change my thoughts about it.
As a fellow author, i know itβs a struggle to better yourself for the purpose of making a great story. Anyways would recommend the story to any kind of reader. Hopefully the author gets better with time so please keep writing!
(P.S. dont forget to review mine hehe.)
This story is good but like many said the grammar is a problem, but in all honesty tha isn't something that will ruin a good story, we all do to some degree make grammar mistakes, so author don't let it be an hindrance, you can get better! and everyone that won't give it a try because of the grammar your missing out i tell you!
I love the story. It's pleasing to read and also the MC is very relatable with her back story. I do agree with the others in the review, a little bit of edit can do the trick especially with your past/present tenses and capitalization. I have no problem with the plot and the character. All good. Keep up the good work, author! Good job.
Good work. I'm looking forward on continuing reading the rest of the chapters. I'm going to add it on my collection so I can read the remaining and upcoming chapters.
The storyline is good and so ot the writing style. The main problem is grammar, you rarely use capitalization on the areas that need it, especially on names and start of sentences. Then you keep stating that Aelex is gay, you already said it once, there is no need to repeat it because the reader already knows. Other than that the story is good and I like the MC (although female lead stories and romance is not my thing).
I can see an interesting plot coming up with a fluent use of language, keep it up author, will catch up with your progress. Added to my collection, gambate~
I super love it~~ keep it up Ms. Author! I really really love the plot it's super interesting... So you deserve a 5 star... Sending lovesβ£οΈβ£οΈβ£οΈ
This story was not at all what I expected in a good way, definitely knows how to get at ones feelings. They characters are most definitely going through some things and it can be seen in the way they talk. Minor fixes but doesnβt take away from the overall read. I think this story has much room to grow and I canβt wait to see what itβll grow Into!
It is a very interesting story and a good read.
The plot is nice and smooth. The character are well made. The author has done quite well evoking the emotions of the reader.
Well done, keep up the good work.
The grammar has some space to improve, capitalization of the sentences, "i"s and ending sentences with full stops and some other minor stuff that could be fixed after a read over.
Overall a very story, well done!
This kinda heartbreaking why does people keep dragging other people down by their greediness and selfish unreasonable reasons Is unfair you know like why can you people live your own life your own way and we live our own way. GOSH THIS story hahaha triggers me so much and I LOVE IT I LOVE THE CHALLENGE LETS DO THIS.π₯π₯π₯π₯π₯πππ
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