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ALLEY
ANOTHER SHAMELESS REVIEW. I AM ALREADY RELEASING THE REVISED EDITION OF THE NOVEL SO THE CURRENT CHAPTER WAS DELETED THANK YOU AND PLEASE DO READ MY NOVEL. JUST A SHAMELESS PROMOTION HEHE
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Eme_Charr
Giving this book a 10, this all started fast but the author revised it and now it's all great. The pacing, the characters, the character development and scenes were worth reading [img=recommend] Good luck with your book, author, keep up the stable updates ✨
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chayasreedeka
I have gone through the first 4 chapters n this writer has done it quite good with clear description of scenes n characters r relatable [img=update][img=faceslap][img=recommend]go for it guys!!
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MissReeed
I liked your book even if it has minor mistakes but now I saw that it was being revised! So excited, I miss Augustine. New title, new cover, new chapters that are even better. Keep it up, author, another step to improvement. Waiting for a lot of great chapters.
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AcrylicPen3
The author was successful in creating a vivid world background. The novel is intriguing and I couldn't stop reading. The adventures of Xavier started in an enthralling way. I'd like it much more if it was a bit less fast-paced. Overall, the author did a good job.
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sunakodwallflower
i am giving you 5.0 stars.since. i love the whole plot of the story.even though i know you are still editing it.why don't you add more actions of the characters? for example when bullets were fired.nicholas.hid behind a metal trash bin? and if he is being rained with bullets. why don't you put in a little more effect? not just saying dodging.say a little more. like: nicholas zigzagged to dodge the bullets, so that he won't get hit. bullets only shoot in a straight line after all. and a little bit more actions. in the fighting. this author is still improving. but you have it all laid out for the story already. kudos to you and your friends.i hope the three of you become successful authors.<3
oh and have backstories for the other characters too like nicholas adoptive father for example.as well as his family why did his family resent him so much.and the like.that's all from me.don't give up on this! ;)
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imagineTishaD
My life resembles with Xavier. I actually live in misery and agony just as Xavier lives.
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whiteribbon27
This books has so much potential but the author should organize it especially the structure of the POV and Dreams it's confusing but it's a nice story overall keep up the good work and don't lose motivation 💯
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bibiyenini
Is this a bit of a thriller or just a contemporary romance that will surely put you off guard when reading about two love birds? Well, you did a great job making me confused out there with the dream on the synopsis! The best way to make the readers hooked is curiosity! And you just did that well! Great job!
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micmicsellaaaa
I feel very irritated with those btches in the first chap. Imagine talking to your parents in that manner? Can I pull their hair? Overall the story is good, and the feelings of the characters are great! Goodjob!😁
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meixiaolian
I like the way you write it, its simple and easy to understand. I won't spoil much for the readers. I like augustine, i also ship augustine and the MC. Keep writing :)))
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Monsoon_Mangoes
When I started reading, I was bit confused- i was like, am I reading an action thriller? But after reading first few chapters, i was intrigued by the plot. I was entralled by the plot development. Usually, in contemperoray romance stories, we are introduced to the characters and their current scenarios in the beginning itself, however in this story author has tried something new and Hats off for the effort. Keep up the good work
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RD_Hughes
There is a great concept to this book. The author understands the feelings of pain and is able to portray that through very relatable characters, and their interactions.
The plot is machine gun listed at you, at a blistering speed and I would like the author to slow down and really describe what is going on, instead of just telling the reader. This makes the big plot moments, that are good, seem very sudden and pass just as quickly.
PROs:
- Great Characters
- A very good concept in the story
- Very relatable interactions between characters
CONs:
- Pace is too fast, and misses details.
Suggestions:
- Better structure of sentences. Especially dialogue
- Show the scene more than tell the scene.
- Don't use HAHA
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Josev_Quadra
Nice story! In fact it's very well-made. However, I would like to know more about the characters development. This novel is very addicting to read due to the intense development. Good work!
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nKaneis
The story is very promising . I like the way you describe everything .Though there are a few grammatical errors . This novel is something I'll continue reading !
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TaintedMetal
The story does deliver on the drama and events that surround the protagonist, from how his family treats him up until he becomes involved in crime.
I enjoy the author's ideas of creating a suspenseful story featuring a character whose been though too much stuff to the point where he lives a life vastly different from his.
I do however, have some criticism towards the overall structure of the story, which in my opinion is told too fast. While I do see Xavier interacting with the people around him, the flow is faster than I expected and I was hoping I could see more of it at a slower pace. There's also Xavier's attitude, which does go through a change before and after he was sent to prison but the changes are way to fast to portray. I understand he has kept a lot of anger in him, but I think it would be best to show his character development overtime, since he is the protagonist after all. Also, the shift from drama to crime is quite fast.
Overall, the author has good ideas. I can see the potential in this story. There just needs to be some changes in the structure and some dialogue. I wish all the best for author and may this story be continued by them.
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Dawn_in_dark
This is very nice and interesting novel. I really appreciate the efforts of author. It's story development and character designs are very good. I liked it. keep it up dear author👍👍
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Chuck45Single
The plot is very interesting and leaves me wanting to find out who the girl is and what's behind Xavier's dreams. I do think the author could work on going more into detail and developing the plot more slowly.
Keep up the good work and keep improving your craft! :)
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Seulil2061
The Book is really good. The more I read the more I got interest. The story description the character discription everything is good. I'm looking forward to read next Chapters 😊
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Vidit_Verma
The novel has a good plot and is promising . The writer is successful in appealing to the readers . At last the novel is overall good and will desperately wait for the next chapters to come . Really enjoyed it
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Kookie_Gee
I really love the whole concept going on here and I love the characters and how the family was described, the different scenes but I hope author writes more of scenes that connect the main parts as in writing a little context between any two main incidents in the book! I absolutely love the plot and how the author leaves cliffhangers! It is a really nice story although there were a little tenses mistakes in the dialogues! I totally recommend this book! Good work author keep up the good work!
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ky_rine
This novel is something I can relate with. Though it is fictional, The characters seemed like they could exist in real life esp. in the first few chapters. Emotions and sentiments were portrayed well. It was a surprise for me when the story progressed. The plot is interesting (maybe it is just me. but i find it a bit sad and dark at some points.)
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ssun_ara
The plot is great. they way the author explain the character and it's circumstances is very easy to understand and the mystery part really hooked me in! I like it!
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shaznalye06
So I found some grammar errors but the book was readable and very captivating I was intrigued at the moment I started reading. Love the way you express ones emotion through a set of beautiful words. Can't wait for your next upload!
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ZOA
The story description and synopsis is just awesome. The story plot really hooked. I think you can write quite well so keep on writing and update soon....
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nixrsr
this story is very interesting! it really got me hooked from the very first chapter! and im looking forward for more chapter because its really a great book!
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AGirlHasNoName20
This is such a rollercoaster of emotions that, as a reader, I couldn't help but be completely immersed in this novel. While I do think there's room for improvement in the description between the dialogue lines (in order to make the story flow better), I'd say you nailed the emotions of the characters. It was amazing going on that journey with Xavier and reading as so much bad stuff happened to him. I loved this story and I can't wait to read the next chapter! Good luck with this!
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_midnightsunshine_
I suggest you read till Chapter 6 at least! Such a captivating story. I was so shook and I couldn’t stop reading. The story is a little too fast paced and I wish author didn’t skip the character developments of the good characters. Otherwise it’s such a good read! I’m adding it to my library...please update!
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Sabin_Subedi_Fei
I am amazed by the story progression. This story really touches your heart through every line the author has written in every single chapter. Though I read only seven chapters I was deeply attracted by this story.
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