Right off the bat, the quality is, in my opinion, strikingly good. At least certainly so for the standards of this site. I've no problems understanding what I read and the chapters have a good enough fluidity that I'm pulled in wanting more. Good quality!
As far as the stability of updates go, I've never cared for them, but it's also a strong point I want to highlight. The author has updated daily and stuck to that statement with the exception of a short period when their focus was on another novel. So a great stability no doubt.
[MINOR SPOILERS AHEAD |:| READ AT YOUR OWN RISK]
The story development is amazing, we see the main character become a master of not only his element but also of himself as a person. He seemingly breaks away from the norm and even goes as far as making his own style and innovating techniques. Hell, the guy can fly using his advanced understanding of his element. The story develops very well, the flow of events is logical and gets you hooked enough to keep reading till the end. Das de gud shiz
The character design is amazing, the main character doesn't just feel like he's a construct of fiction. He's detailed enough to be understood and normal enough to relate to. His thoughts and feelings are often portrayed and written out for us to understand him, it almost feels like I'm growing with him too, as I follow him through his journey. Another great aspect of this novel, is it's authenticity. It stays true to the personality of the canon characters, mainly Master Pakku, his personality is as true as it gets. It almost feels like I'm reading an actual Avatar novel.
The world background is well done, though I myself have watched the series and therefor have no need for such detailed environment, I'm more than certain that those who have not, will have no problem creating the mental image of the scenarios and events that play out.
Over all, I strongly believe this novel deserves a full 5 star review even though it's still in it's beginning stages. I am eager to read more, especially so now, seeing that the author has returned and is putting their focus into this masterpiece here.
And dear author, if you do end up reading my review, please drop a like, or a comment, show me you've read it. It'd mean a lot. Thanks!
One of the few books I have actually finished, Cornbringer's other works were a little disappointing or maybe that's just me π€.
-But seriously, the character design is well done.
-There are little if any grammar errors.
-The work is completed, though the end does feel a little rushed for lack of a better term with of course the Vaatu situation and the fact that he wasn't allowed to use bending due to... well I will let you read yourself to find out.
-And of course the world background is ATLA so it's bound to have full marks in that area.
It's funny because almost a year after reading the book, I finally decided to write a review lol so if you feel something is missing don't hesitate to point it out.
Of course, if my review tempts you enough to try it, why not... you know...
this novel is great great i been avoiding it cause I only watch ALTA as a kid and I didn't manage to watch all the episodes so after I re watched ALTA i read this and it's pretty good the only thing I didn't like is there is no chapter tittle, to me it's equivalent to a very good book with a slightly bad translator enjoyable but could be better
Writing Quality - Average at best, there are a few spelling and grammar errors. The major issues are with the massive exposition as the MC is a loner edge lord that talks to himself way too much. This leads too a lot of 'tell don't show', a staple of poor writing.
Story Development - MC is a loner edge lord, so story just moves to make him stronger and edgier, while he trudges along all lonely.
Character Design - MC is a loner edge lord with no real reason for any of that edge. No traumatic incidents, no losses, nothing. Just edgy for no reason. He also barely interacts with anyone, actively keeping away from others. Again, for no real reason, maybe some personality disorders. This kills possibilities for character development in the MC and other characters.
Updating Stability- As it is completed so full marks.
World background - Fairly average, lots of focus on a Spirit world, very little on the actual physical world.
This is probably one of my favorite fanfics although a little short at least it wasn't dropped. I also love the way that Vaatu's character developed over the course of the story. I think his character was done amazingly.
Would have been better if the author didnβt write it in the last air bender timeline. A fanfic is best when an existing world and mechanics are used without touching cannon, just in my reading experience, but otherwise itβs decent work.
One of the best fanfiction I've ever read. Some characters have a mentality that may bother some people, but this character belongs to them in the original version and there's nothing you can do about it. The development is good and well organized, there's a real plot... In short, I love it.
Like many have said, this was waisted potential. I think the author didnt have an endgoal in mind when he started writing this and so many things he sets up like, the mc's talent, him becoming stronger after being rebuild and his romance are largely abandoned and mean nothing by the end of the series. Every time the story builds momentum it goes back to square one.
Most of this is showed with the ending being so anticlimactic and feels rushed with the end of ozai and a challenge from Life mushed together with no reward for completing either of those. This is a reoccurring theme with Cornbringers mc's never really having a (interesting)goal and makes everything they do feel empty.
It started great but as it continued is was gradually degrading.
IFY Author/MC a positive outcome isn't, well, a good thing if the methods used were dishonest or harmful to others(Azula mindwipe was really bad/stupid on your side)
Honestly this was a good book, very good buildup and while Iβm glad you actually finished the book, the ending did not truly do justice to it, if anything it got me feeling really empty
Having the MC merge with Vaatu ruined the story completely.
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I liked it quite a lot . But there where to many instenses where he changed his plan and where he was suppose to go to quickly, and I did not like that. But is is properly part of chaos to be ever changing. I would have loved a longer story as this one felt to quick and forced to be able to have many things in it but little amount of details. But it was a good read
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