Chapter comments on the chapter THE AGE OF EXOTICS AND TECHNOLOGY. of the book THE CONSPIRACY OF THE ELITES.

Please guys, I've noticed that you guys point out mistakes in the paragraph comment box. Please if you see more mistakes, comment in the chapter comment box. It's really tedious for me to be checking all the paragraph comments.

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this is not negative, but the exposition dump at the begining of the chapter is framed as a conversation, like the character is talking to someone. Which he is not. Try framing the exposition more like a first person inner monologue, makes more sense and doesnt sound like he is talking to himself about information most people in this world know. just thought that might help. i dig the concept and hope the novel goes long.

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Considering this is your first book, this is incredible, I'm enjoying this...

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Pretty good start, I hope to find even better content in the later chapters

An amazing first chapter 👌🏿

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Hey guys, for all new readers. Please this is my first book, so the first few chapters are not really up to par. I'm currently editing them again, I've edited up to chapter 58, so please be patient if you can. I'll slowly raise the novel's quality.