Webnovel Author: Stuman - Fanfic&Novel Collection

That’s way too irresponsible than vengeful. The kid wouldn’t deserve having a mother like her.

That’s a good idea.

I have no idea why ‘a m a t a u r’ is censored....

This chapter seems mostly focus on the exciting incident. We get introduced to the character and the incident just happens. I feel like there wasn’t enough time given to flesh out the most distinctive aspects of her personality. It’s almost like there was introductions to characters, but nothing grounding the readers in their mindset. For example: Hating someone, nervousness for a new school year, passion for hobby, etc. This is where some ******* reviewers would say something like: “You didn’t give the readers a reason to care.” In summation, try focusing on one key aspect of the main character before letting it flow info the exciting incident. After all, it just suddenly happened with no warning...