Webnovel Author: Boilala - Novel Collection

Alright so I'll start with the positives. •There are no noticable grammatical errors so far. Everything is cleanly written, the characters thoughts and thought process being well described. Everything is also clearly understandable so theres no real chance of getting confused since the author writes, once again, clearly and cleanly. •The characters are well written and charming, the sisters relationship being well done. (Trust me I have a brother). Their reactions make sense and they have a set personality, of course they are fully capable of change. •The uploads are perfect. The author, at the time of posting this has had to reduce upload times due to personal matters but considering how she followed her pre-set schedule initially without missing a day I think it's safe to say that theres no worries of a chapter not showing up when up when it's supposed too. Alright now for the flaws. •It's cliche. It starts with an interesting hook. Twins meeting destiny's incarnate after training for all their life to demand something of it. Fairly interesting right? Well the incarnation of destiny will reincarnate them into a fantasy game world with a level system. The sisters solve an issue by dueling each other. If this is your kind of thing go ahead just know that the author doesnt just rely on the cliches solely. Theres some real solid story here with great character interactions. •The world doesn't really feel there. When describing the incarnation of destiny or a charector there is plenty of detail put in. Everything else gets the most basic description. A hut. Shiny magic rocks. grassy plains. This is a nitpick, I know, but I still think it's an issue since the characters will often be interacting in said shack. I dont know what's in the shack. Is there just a bed? Wheres the door? Does it have any decorations that might signify the natives culture? I dont know. Everything is just white. This is it really.

Thank you very much. I will take everything you said into account and will try my best to improve on these issues:)

Your welcome. i hope I can recieve some advice from you since you seem to be a more professional writer than me. Thank you for taking mu review into consideration and havwa wonderfull time:)

Hello there I am here to do a shameless review as well as to say some things. So first I rate the writing quality a 3 since I am by no means a professional writer. There are plenty of grammatical errors and missied commas. Thankfully it's usually 1 or 2 mistakes per chapter as I do try to proof read. Story development. A little fast passed but not to bad. Though there is a common issue of overexplaining. The author really likes the show dont tell method of writing so he will often leave some foreshadowing hints and such among the. main characters monologue. Charector desighn. Perfect. Just perfection. Unfortunately since this review was posted the amount of side charectors are minimal with most of the screen time being taken up by the main character. Uploading Stability. Perfect havent missed a day with the exception of a minor accident. World Building. Too few chapters to say anything yet. Now for the extra words. For all who plan to read please note that this story is in the first person perspective. Also while the central theme is scifi in the beggining there will be more of a focus on gods, excluding when the mc makes something. In which case I will try to be as detailed as possible.