Webnovel Author: NovaLuna - Novel Collection

NovaLuna

5mth

Replied to Vanadhi_Lucia

Thank you for explaining this. I was honestly very confused by how it was worded (attending college before high school).

They eventually entered a college together and successfully ascended to high school.

NovaLuna

5mth

Replied to Lourila

Yes. There was no doubt in my mind about that. It's why his blood is so much more potent than other house leaders. It's not diluted over the years, which is why he can create races that have long since been extinct, or considered to now be "rare". His blood is just as strong as any of the originals blood was.

"Yes, I'm unsure of what the vampire did to me that day. As I said, it was all a blur the minute he looked at me with those red eyes." Arthur replied. "But my bloodline was not considered to be from one of the thirteen. In a way, I was considered a first like them, or at least an artificial first."

My Vampire System

Fantasy · JKSManga

NovaLuna

5mth

Replied to LaoTze

True, but it doesn't change the fact that you can tell this was a rough draft. It's very easy to write the dialogue 1st, then go back through to add in details, description, actions, touch, smells, sounds, etc... I never said it had to be overly wordy. But a good description is essential for a good story. 🙂

ch 0 1 Chapter 1: Are you planning to hold me like this forever?

My Trillion-Dollar Assets is Exposed by My Wife's Bragging!

Urban · Rainbow Bubble Fish

NovaLuna

5mth

Commented

R.I.P. Theo!

I can't wait to see Theobauld again. What will his face look like? Will he scold me again? Or will he smile while listening to my plan?

Raised in Dungeon

Fantasy · Hile_Lawrence

NovaLuna

5mth

Commented

Typo: "her" face should be "his" face

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Raised in Dungeon

Fantasy · Hile_Lawrence

NovaLuna

5mth

Replied to Hile_Lawrence

Ooh! That's interesting! I remember seeing that photo of them both showing their crest marking how they were both slaves. Thank you for explaining about the difference of the crest placement! 🙂

'Illska is lucky to move Illska's heart to the stomach. "Or else Illska would have died,' Illska thought.

Raised in Dungeon

Fantasy · Hile_Lawrence

NovaLuna

5mth

Replied to Hile_Lawrence

Pretty!

[ILLUSTRATION]

Raised in Dungeon

Fantasy · Hile_Lawrence

NovaLuna

5mth

Replied to Hile_Lawrence

Oh dang. That sucks. I'm sorry! 😢

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Raised in Dungeon

Fantasy · Hile_Lawrence

NovaLuna

5mth

Commented

I get the feeling as if Allen just learned how to access Reig's Shikai state, here! 🤭😜

"Dai abare, Reig." He unconsciously mumbled the same word Theobauld and Ottar used to release their armacar's ability. As Allen muttered it, his scarf fused with his right hand, turning into a sword attached to Allen's right hand.

Raised in Dungeon

Fantasy · Hile_Lawrence

NovaLuna

5mth

Commented

Author: This paragraph is a repeat of the paragraph directly prior to this. Just worded slightly different. I'm assuming you were re-writing the paragraph, and forgot to delete the old paragraph?

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Raised in Dungeon

Fantasy · Hile_Lawrence

NovaLuna

5mth

Commented

A projection of a lazy and fat orange cat appeared.

Sorry, But I Never Rely On Luck When Playing Cards

Games · Stir-Fried Eggs With Oranges

NovaLuna

5mth

Replied to Hile_Lawrence

Thank you! I wasn't sure if it was just a phrase I wasn't familiar with, or not. 🙂

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Raised in Dungeon

Fantasy · Hile_Lawrence

NovaLuna

5mth

Commented

Typo: "she can tell" should be "he can tell".

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Raised in Dungeon

Fantasy · Hile_Lawrence

NovaLuna

5mth

Commented

Typo: "how she got out" should be "how he got out". The sentence is referring to Ottar (a guy).

First, the battle-loving paladin, Ottar Hannefson. He used to be a peasant, but the Archbishop picked him up and turned him into a paladin because he dealt with problems well. Before he became a paladin, he was a Mithril-ranked dungeon explorer who lost his whole group on the 6th floor. He was the only one who took the six dead bodies of his group out of the dungeon. The many cuts and bruises on his body and face showed that he let monsters attack him while he was carrying the bodies. No one could figure out how she got out without being hurt. His toughness and resilience were just what the emergency mission needed.