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I'm just a person who loves chocolates...💝

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mere jaisa era hai yeh toh..😂😂

After a week, they asked Ruby to go away and not sleep in that place. Ruby questioned if he can sleep in the jail then, but they refused that. He didn't listen to them and went back to the footpath.

Demon King System

Demon King System

Fantasy · Dark_demise

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"Why was murder immoral, but eating animals was normal? Why talk about freedom and force everyone to wear clothes? What was the point of paying for land to build a house on top of it? Isn't land supposed to be free, who decided that government owns the land? They never asked me. Is that too much to ask?"

Demon King System

Demon King System

Fantasy · Dark_demise

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OVERALL - I liked The Young Master’s Idol Agency and I would definitely recommend this to others. PLOT - It was simple yet surprisingly complex. I felt like the author is going on a spoof comedic tone but I assume there is also chance for action. CHARACTERS - MC Gu Ling has a system and it is not a complex system. He has the potential to grow and as far as I read, he seems likable which is far more than I could say for some other novels. Since the novel has only 5 chapters, there isn't much space for the other characters to shine. it's not in any way a bad thing. Every character needs time and space for them to grow and I feel the characters in this novel would become three dimensional well-defined characters. PACING - Pacing was fast, almost too fast. My humble opinion is that the author should slow down a bit and describe the world around and what the characters were thinking a little bit more. It'd be great if we see more third person view. IMMERSION -  As I mentioned above, because of the first person view, I feel like many things that could be done better are missing.  'Show, not tell' the author should take more time establishing  the world around and the characters to make us immerse. Don't take it that I didn't immerse myself, I just want to get immersed more which the author can definitely do. EDITING - There are no major grammar mistakes or story flaw errors that interrupted my reading. Granted I'm not a native English speaker but I enjoyed my reading without a problem
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