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MrChinchila

2yr

Replied to TheBlackHatMan

Yeah, feels a bit dishonest having two of the same review.

[Dropped for now] - Rise of the Yokai Lord

Eastern · MrChinchila

MrChinchila

2yr

Replied to TheBlackHatMan

Is this an alt account of yours? Cause you repeated the same review. I'll delete one of them either way, repeated reviews feel awkward and doesn't add much.

[Dropped for now] - Rise of the Yokai Lord

Eastern · MrChinchila

MrChinchila

2yr

Replied to RoarWritings

Yeah. I'll probably try to step up a bit in my descriptions next chapter.

[Dropped for now] - Rise of the Yokai Lord

Eastern · MrChinchila

MrChinchila

2yr

Replied to RoarWritings

Yeah. It made little sense and was a bit out of character. Oda isn't that cocky.

ch 0 1 A Second Chance

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Eastern · MrChinchila

MrChinchila

2yr

Replied to RoarWritings

I think I mentioned he was a cat. like normal cat. he just act like a human. also it's a he.

ch 0 2 Liuetenant!

[Dropped for now] - Rise of the Yokai Lord

Eastern · MrChinchila

MrChinchila

2yr

Replied to RoarWritings

Rereading it now. It sounds a bit cringe and weird. I'll rewrite into something that makes sense.

ch 0 1 A Second Chance

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Eastern · MrChinchila

MrChinchila

2yr

Replied to Zackary_Zhangcheng

Yeah, I'll fix it. I think him knowing that he died is a bit odd as well now rereading it. thanks for pointing it out.

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Eastern · MrChinchila

MrChinchila

2yr

Replied to Mayemura

Also, I swear. I have nothing against parents. I have great parents. What inspired me to make parents like this, was a situation that I saw with a friend of mine. He is fine now, yet he had to move since they were too controlling.

ch 0 1 A Second Chance

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Eastern · MrChinchila

MrChinchila

2yr

Replied to Mayemura

oh? Yeah, that was my fault I need to explain it better. It's the Japanese Mythology version of an ogre.

ch 0 1 A Second Chance

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Eastern · MrChinchila

MrChinchila

2yr

Replied to Zackary_Zhangcheng

Thanks, will revise the things you mentioned.

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Eastern · MrChinchila

MrChinchila

2yr

Replied to MrChinchila

Yeah, gotta watch out. Some reviews are basically copy paste 5 stars that doesn't help much for us to develop. I call out their attention in the forum and delete copy paste 5 stars reviews. Feels dishonest to have them, you know?

Abused Yet Indestructible Princess

Fantasy · Mayemura

MrChinchila

2yr

Posted

Ok. The potential is there. The story is interesting but I just can't give you a good grade at the writing. There are some glaring things that need correction in regards to that. There rest is well done. The concept is good. But the formatting and the writing needs fixing. I know you can fix it! Good luck!

Abused Yet Indestructible Princess

Fantasy · Mayemura

MrChinchila

2yr

Commented

CALM DOWN! There is no need for that many exclamation points. I'd suggest you edit them out to only one after 'SUMMER' and 'now'.

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Abused Yet Indestructible Princess

Fantasy · Mayemura

MrChinchila

2yr

Posted

From what I read so far, I really like your spacial description(the ambiences where the scenes take place). Everything is well written, although you have a tendency of writing ' ... ' a bit too often. Also there is a funny mistake in the first chapters, that REALLY needs to be updated.

My Demon Pet System

Eastern · Immanioripse

MrChinchila

2yr

Replied to R_a_v_an

"Oh, fuck! Shit! What devilry is this? Taming Demons? I don't even remember my name!" he said hysterically, "Hey! You… um… stupid inscription on the wall! I'm talking to you!" the young farmer said aloud, while the second inscription also disappeared before his eyes.

My Demon Pet System

Eastern · Immanioripse

MrChinchila

2yr

Commented

This gets the same vibes as a phrase I heard once. "Leave my galaxy or superdie."

"Welcome to your Demon Pet System, your second life's redemption attempt. Tame a Demon in the next 48 hours or die forever."

My Demon Pet System

Eastern · Immanioripse

MrChinchila

2yr

Replied to Immanioripse

It's like pokemon. Yet you made it satanic.

As soon as it heard that phrase, the Nekage stopped moving. It stood still and continued to stare forward with its small, demonic red eyes.

My Demon Pet System

Eastern · Immanioripse

MrChinchila

2yr

Commented

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My Demon Pet System

Eastern · Immanioripse

MrChinchila

2yr

Replied to Pritam_Rathore

A miracle beyond the explanations of common science, of course.

"Aargh... my head... it doesn't stop spinning!" he whispered, massaging his temples and turning to one side. " I can... I can breathe again!"

My Demon Pet System

Eastern · Immanioripse

MrChinchila

2yr

Posted

So, I really enjoy your prose. The first five(actually six if counting prologue) chapters from what I read were good. There were some rough sentences that need some editing though, that's why I can't grade your writing 5. But if you catch those punctuation details, it would be an easy 5. I checked and you seem to update every 2 days, so your updates are quite stable. Story, Character and World so far for me is a bit early to say, yet from what I read, I'm really enjoying it so far. Keep it up!

Rightful Vengeance

Fantasy · Samantha_R_Samuel

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