Chapter comments on the chapter The Coming of the Sects and the Tragedy of Song Family of the book The Way of the Sword (BL)

This chapter would benefit from some proofreading, but I am interested in seeing how the boys do.

Good world build, but when writing numbers ( 1;2;3 ) its better to use like ( one, two, three ) :)

Interesting but idk. I'm a little frustrated with the world building since there are a lot of discrepancies and plot holes (like how can there be empires without smaller countries? What role do the sects play in the world? Just to produce 'heroes'?). Also I'm confused about this Song character since the MC's name in the summary is different but... Yeah, idk. I'm gonna keep reading because it has potential but I'm confused right now.

Good! 🙆😘

I liked the chapter. It has a lot of details which make you feel that the author is not just rushing to get to the next scene.

Awe, I feel bad for the boy.

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The chapter is quite engaging but too many information especially on the division of sects and realms. Not easy to follow.

Gf

I'm already into this story.

The story looks interesting, 🤔😊

thanks

Awesome

Hmm..thats a nice opening..

Nice 👍👍

The world is very interesting! Just the beginning, and everything is already so in depth! The wording can get confusing though and could use some editing.

Congrats on the #59 prompt runner-up placing. Nice. 🥳

The village people are so heartless, why would anyone call a beggar boy a problem, these people need to be spanked with a broom, lol. BTW, loving the story so far, although the beginning was alittle dull, the chapter became interesting later. and also good world building, atleast I know alot about the type of wold these beggar kids are living in.

Interessante

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