Really enjoyed this, I wish author would come back this has the makings of an excellent fanfic.
From the details to the steady background also adding in more supernatural creatures to keep it interesting I hope weβll see more in the future Author!
Well it's not the best that I'd read in my novel reading years, but it has a potential especially the male oc is not a jerk who always have a harem like are you super hunger. And more action after all it's vampire diaries full of mystery and blood filling scene. Question: The true main cast of the movie, will they show in your fanfic novel, especially Elijah? Moreover my other favorite character, and is there a romance, when will you update author?
Be relax and be healthy author, just like I'd said there's a potential that this novel be a 'best', so fighting!!!
The MC is so average that it's boring. It's not entertaining, or fun...so why read?
I expected nothing more from an author seeking to craft so-called 'good-guy' MC. No ambition. No personality. Bland, boring.
personaly i thought this novel wont be that great, but i was wrong the character arthur is pretty interesting and his power not sure about them and the begining was really good not the prolouge.
Glad you are back. Would like to know how much of the other universes is going to be integated and how it will effect the vampire diaries storyline. Based on the enphasis on the crows behavior are you going with the more magical version of vampires from the book?
Totally loving it .It really has potential. Keep on writing it .With coming of more chapters i am sure it will rank up someday.It is my first time reading a VPD fanfic and i really seems interesting.π
nice take on the story unique in its own way and also marvelous approach to the story so i hope the writer keep up the good work and readers just give it chance and i really hope the writer dont stop midway because of some reason and abandon this peice
Your writing is great and you pay attention to the small details, which a lot of authors donβt do as a habit. I donβt know about the update stability, so here, have some free rating. The story development is 4 because it has some element of wish-fulfillment, and to be fair, this is a fanfic which means it is wish-fulfillment. Character design is 3 because of personal bias, however I suggest that you raise his self-esteem in his new life and if you can explain more about the issue of his self-esteem, it canβt be just because heβs average, maybe his father was abusive? World development is 4 because, well itβs a fanfic and itβs 1 chapter only. You gave him an interesting power that you can abuse and make some expansions on it. Another point I want to expand on is the vulnerability and determination of the MC, you made him vulnerable which is really a great way to start a chapter and show the readers that he is a human and he is not invincible. I donβt about his determination, because determination comes from either family, friends, dreams, goals and traumatic experience. e.g. Batman, Superman, Spider-Man, etc. All of them are heroes and you clearly want your MC to be some sort of hero thatβs morally right and sometimes vulnerable like Spider-Man. In conclusion you have a great start and some good skills. Hold on to your start and remember to pay great attention to details and emotions of your Characters. Because these two are VERY important to a writer. P.S. Love the idea of a male slayer. Also a female angel?
Interesting concept im excited to read later chapters and i hope the chapters are consistent cause It been A while since theres been a Good Vpd fanfic on here
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