Reviews of 3 hours - A Gamble Of Time. by Gaureeey - Webnovel

Seriously, the only reason I didn't binge this before is because my school decided to get in my way. I ended up finishing very quickly after diving into the story. I feel like I wrote less than I usually do, but I did add a lot of paragraph comments. ~I see a lot of people aren't fond of 1st POV, but I tend to like it. Regardless, you use it very well here! (If anything, there's a lot of switching between 1st and 2nd POV, but I think it's fine in this context.) ~Your word choice is absolutely gorgeous! ~The content was so nice that I overlooked some of the comma issues and run-ons near the beginning. Really, this is going to only help with flow. The sentences themselves already are very clear. (I actually think em dashes would probably fit your writing style more than commas or semicolons in some areas; I can see you used them later on.) ~If you end a quote with a question mark or exclamation point, there's no need for a comma outside the quotation marks. (If there isn't a period, make sure there's a comma inside the quotation marks to lead into a dialogue tag.) Also, try to keep it to one speaker per paragraph! This makes it less confusing. (Not that it was confusing in this case, but it does help as far as formatting goes. The first time I noticed this was in the fourth paragraph of Chapter 2.) ~Last thing about quotes: If the speaker continues for multiple paragraphs without a dialogue tag, each paragraph starts with only opening quotation marks. Only the last paragraph in which that speaker talks has the ending quotation marks. (Each line can end with a period.) This might help make the dialogue less confusing! ~THESE DESCRIPTIONS ARE IMMACULATE! ~There's a little bit of switching around on the tenses, but it's not particularly bad. ~I love how you build emotional tension and mix in dialogue and humor to release it! ~I find it both interesting and sad how Dave surrounds himself with his memories in artificial ways (Xara in VR and the Helen robot). The comparison between the artificial and real is just so complex, and you generally have a lot of nuanced concepts that you explore in-depth. ~A lot of Sci-Fi/Fantasy novels make the mistake of dumping too much information at once. Yours does not. The teacher explaining the important concepts to his students is a great way to introduce these ideas! (The only parts of this chapter I didn't like were the "stage directions" portions. The narration could have explained these things without needing to put them in asterisks.) ~Sometimes, the descriptions are a bit long-winded and distract from the overall plot, but they're so lovely that I'd hate to see them removed entirely. (Mainly, this is an issue in Chapter 4.) I honestly think too much detail is better than too little detail, though. Conversely, I felt Chapter 6 had the opposite problem during the dinner with Jessi. (There are fewer descriptions as the chapters go on, it seems.) ~I love all the casual LGBT+ representation! It makes me very happy to see, especially with some of the less common identities! (I let out a squeal at Bianca and Kavya with their kids.) ~Simple scene breaks (***) rather than the locations in the apostrophes may also help! In Chapter 7, the description almost entirely removes the suspense of the flashback. ~I love the humanization of the AI robots! I felt like Chapters 10 and 11 slowed down some, but introducing this idea more in Chapter 12 made it much more interesting! These lines are powerful! ~Out of sheer curiosity, author, how many languages do you speak? I think the inclusion of lots of languages is neat! :o This novel is lovely, so I hope you'll update it soon! I love it! (Take your time, of course, since I hope you maintain the high quality of the early chapters!) Lovely job so far~! (5/5)

Dear Author, hmm... should start again: Hi sweet girl, how are you? Why you're not writing??? Is everything ok? I love your story and waiting for more. All the best, xxx